People in communities can make decisions that protect and improve the natural environment. Which ONE of the following three actions is MOST useful for people to do if they want to help the environment in their local community? Why?
- Plant trees and create parks
- Persuade local shops to stop providing plastic bags to costumers
- Increase access to public transportation ( for example, buses or trains) to reduce the number of automobiles on local roads
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is generally agreed that a serious concern about our natural resources and environment keeps growing every day. The most useful solution for this issue is increasing amount of trees and parks. I will broach some reasons that validate my opinion.
The first thing that need to be said, is that this particular problem the danger of a dramatically changed weather recently showed that it have deleterious effects all over the world. The natural disasters like storm, tornado take away all living organisms on its’ way, provoke spreading of infection diseases among human. The annual temperature has increased and leaded to worsen quantity and quality of agricultural products and a people’s live conditions. There is a strong body of scientific evidence that the climate change phenomenon caused by human activities such as deforestation and usage of automobile cars. This reasoned the Carbone Dioxide pollution. Some options could be provided to reduce amount of Carbon Dioxide in atmosphere. Moreover, decreasing its’ levels the quality of air in cities would certainly improve, which lead to a better quality of a human life. Planting trees and creating parks would diminish the pollution and prevent further issues. It is a well known fact that trees able to provide oxygen by consuming the Carbone Dioxide.
Another strong point, to give preference to planting trees is that this way our ecosystems would looks and works significantly better than in a current time. The Kingdom of animals is reducing too, because of altered weather conditions. More specifically, recent surveys provided the number of hundreds of species of insects that are disappearing from our planet at the moment. The ecosystem is on the way of detrimental changes that would have crucial impact not only on human lives but on every living creature. The system is not capable to sustain under influence of the climate change phenomenon. Unless, the humanity establish a strong commitment to pursuing right improvements of natural sustainability.
To draw a conclusion, creating parks and planting trees will improve not only the amount and quality of the air and also help to maintain the whole ecosystem, to protect the environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'look'
Suggestion: look
...s is that this way our ecosystems would looks and works significantly better than in ...
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Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uence of the climate change phenomenon. Unless, the humanity establish a strong commit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32203389831 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82930159098 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59604519774 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5715400434 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1578947368 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122277084674 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034256886585 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461009900275 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091105395629 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478420133503 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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