Everyone has a different way to achieve his own success. Success come after a big journey of work and study however, there is disagreement a bout if luck can help us to success or working hard is only the one way to success.
Initially, I believe in luck as well but it is not always the reason for success however, many people suffer from lack of luck but they always success, people study hard and graduate from school then university and starts to look for job and works hard and some can reach the success while others cannot. That comes from many reasons for instance, been from a good family with a good relationship or if you have a good talent that maybe open many doors and give you many opportunities. By way of illustration, the soccer player Messi are very lucky to have a great talent and he won many times as the best player in the world this player have a great skill cannot obtain from practice or training in the other hand, there is another player his names is C. Ronaldo also a soccer player he has a great skills came from practice and training and from his story it is obvious how he suffer in his life and how he worked hard to be what he is now.
Moreover, sometimes after we worked hared we need some of luck to achieve our ambition for instance, in TOEFL test if you writing essay about any topic you should have some knowledge and some vocabularies also you should know how to order the essay after that you will be apple to write an essay and get a good score but if you don't have any vocabularies you well not get any score. people who believe in luck may have less competitiveness and lack of responsibility and many of them don't have the ability to solve problems and always suffer from the failure and think lack of luck effect their performances and achievements.
In my conclusion, I think each person have a different way to achieve his success and in my opinion, working hard withe some of luck is the best way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39944903581 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39671321357 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468319559229 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.3462475394 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.444444444 100.406767564 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.3333333333 20.6045352989 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5555555556 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163473223724 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746116703121 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483830604725 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11142609221 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00819054122312 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 11.7677419355 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.13 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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