Do you prefer watching TV programmes for knowledge or just for entertainment?
Television invention can be considered as one the most influential invention of human and the fast that it is an inextricable part of our daily life is undeniable. Some people believe that they can count on this device for learning different things, while others consider it just as a joyful box. I myself support the second notion for two main reason and the ensuing paragraphs will elaborate the rationales behind my statement.
Let’s start with the consideration of the fact that is about the variety of television programs. I think as they are wide ranging, their contents are superficial and cannot be considered as a program for deep and comprehensive learning. They also use different advertisements during their programs that are just means for revenue augmentation. So I rely on TV programs as source of pleasure instead of a learning one. For instance, there is a channel that completely is devoted to sports programs, but as there are so many different sports, they cannot give complete information about each of them. So I think that we should watch it just for enjoyment and fun.
Another significant reason that deserves attention is about the demand of viewers, there are lots of people who watch TV just for enjoyment and spend their time watching programs for entertainment. The last year survey proved this issue as the rate of people who use TV for joy was not comparable to the rate of those who watch its programs for leaning. So, if owners of a channel do not pay attention to the public need, they will lose their viewers immediately. So they prefer to provide more enjoyable programs instead of programs that relate to viewers’ knowledge. So it is clear that if we use this device for learning, we will not gain what we search for.
With all the above factors taken into consideration, TVs are an excellent device for entertainment as they have variety of programs that can cover all our needs. Although in some cases they try to show us that they are concern about our knowledge, their main purpose is to sell their enjoyable programs. So what do you think? Can they be considered as an important tool for improving people knowledge?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, while, for instance, i think, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87061994609 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80464405781 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514824797844 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6832029758 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.388888889 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309650800741 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101296355517 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769466288614 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18147407646 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655320656479 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.