Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financial management is a term which every person should know about it more or less. In fact even if you are a financial manager or just a regular guy trying to handle your fiscal matters you should be aware of managing your money. As a result, some people believe that, children must be taught in order to learn different aspects of financial stuff. Others think that children will learn how to handle their financial responsibilities through their future live. As far as I am a person who always think about this subject, I agree with the fact that we should teach our children and help them to be more wise about their money. The rationale behind my statement will be explored in the ensuing paragraphs.
To commence with, we should be aware of the fact that is about the importance of children practicing and trying to be careful in spending their budget. Consider a child who used to be conscious about his/her money in contrast to a child who does not know anything about wisely spending money. For instance, I myself always try to teach my younger brother how to buy different things which are commensurate to his money.
Another reason that deserves attention, frankly speaking, is about the process of learning which is very easier when you are young. It is totally clear that if you do not teach your children how to spend and manage their money at younger stage of their live, it will be very hard for them to learn. In fact, a research about spending money was took place in my country that has shown cash was spent by people who were not taught how to manage their money was about twenty percent more than others.
With all the above factor taken into consideration, learning how to manage our financial issues in early stage of life not only helps us to practice it a longer time, but also it is easier for us to learn it. Hence, I suggest teaching our children ways of being careful about their money, in order to keep them away from possible dangerous future financial problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, hence, if, so, as to, for instance, in contrast, in fact, as a result, in contrast to, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62921348315 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37599938109 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.3840764677 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.714285714 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283858796169 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109673741811 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591919403781 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182487922019 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691055837441 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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