Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The writer of the argument recommends that they should forbid the entrance of skateboard users in the central plaza in order to bring back the success they had before; however, this conclusion cannot be accepted as it is in that bases on a number of erroneous premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
To commence with, the first problem with the argument is the writer wrong assumption about the connection of the skateboards popularity and the decreasing number of shoppers in central plaza. There is no strong evidence to prove the authenticity of this assumption. Maybe this wane is not related to the popularity of skateboarding at all, in fact it is a matter of the quality of their commodities that has decreased through these years. Or maybe the problem is with their higher prices in contrast with other parts of the city. Or maybe there are better shopping centers in the city which attracts most of their customers. Therefore, we cannot accept the writer assumption about this issue.
Another problematic assumption of the writer is about the vandalism and litter which is now common in the central plaza, the writer also connects this problem with the use of skateboards. This is also not acceptable as there is not enough information about people who has done these activities. Maybe these are the consequences of the night club that was constructed next to the plaza last year, people who attend in that club always are not wise and they committed these crimes. Or maybe some people have done these works in order to show their protest to the high price their goods.
Furthermore, the writer of the argument believes that by banning the usage of skateboards, they can return to their golden time. This assumption is also unwarranted and there is no evidence to support it. Maybe their loss of customer is due to the new malls that have both lower prices and higher quality. Even if he is right, maybe a new shopping mall is built next to them which attracts their customers during these years in which skateboards were not banned. As a result, they cannot back to good condition just by prohibiting the skateboards and they should do extra efforts in order to fascinate their previous shoppers.
In the final analysis, the writer’s recommendation cannot be taken to be correct because, as it was shown in the above paragraphs, it depends on a number of flawed assumptions each of which is questionable. The recommendation can only be accepted it the weaknesses already referred to are all removed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2064 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.2 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer of the argument recommends th...
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Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that they should forbid the entrance of skateboard users in the central plaza in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be challenged in one way or another. To commence with, the first problem with...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skateboards'' or 'skateboard's'?
Suggestion: skateboards'; skateboard's
... assumption about the connection of the skateboards popularity and the decreasing number of...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e writer assumption about this issue. Another problematic assumption of the wr...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rotest to the high price their goods. Furthermore, the writer of the argument ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to fascinate their previous shoppers. In the final analysis, the writer's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, in contrast, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87557603687 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73567907218 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470046082949 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2700463524 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.555555556 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159756191257 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504098325785 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609310774604 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881473251119 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543427645522 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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