On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author claims here that to reduce the number of accidents on Balmer Island, the town council should limit the number of mopeds rented by the islands' moped rental companies. Stated this way, the argument reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminologies. The author supports his argument with significant results of the neighboring Seaville Island. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that limiting the number of mopeds rented during the summer season will have a considerable effect on the number of accidents in Balmer Island. This is merely an assumption made out without much solid ground. For example, the increasing number of accidents can be due to other reasons such as bad road conditions, improper road diversion, small road width, etc. In this circumstance, the given argument can be significantly weakened. Hence the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated the road conditions of Balmer Island.
Secondly, will decreasing the number of mopeds rental in the summer season reduce the annual number of an accident on the Island? It can be possible that in the peak summertime tourist opt for public transport such as buses and taxis and the major number of accidents happen in the rest of the year. Due to a small number of people for the rest of the year, people tend to drive mopeds faster and with little care. This again can weaken the claim.
Finally, the author cites that limiting the number of mopeds as that of neighboring islands will give significant results. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions. Since, the author did not consider various factors such as the number of population, road conditions, methods of limitations, etc. What if the population in Seaville Island is less than that of Balmer Island which gives a reason for fewer accidents. And taking an example of a time we can also assume that the accidents in Balmer are happening in different time periods than Seaville’s Island. Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster, the author must provide clear concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a detailed analysis of the different potent conditions of accidents. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about why the number of accidents is less in Seaville Island and what do they differ in than Balmer Island.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2394 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.094 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.642 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.474 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 502, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...pport for the author's conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered incomple...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ting the number of mopeds rented during the summer season will have a considerable effect on the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...argument can be significantly weakened. Hence the argument would have been much more ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'decrease'
Suggestion: decrease
...ons of Balmer Island. Secondly, will decreasing the number of mopeds rental in the summ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...creasing the number of mopeds rental in the summer season reduce the annual number of an accident...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...nd? It can be possible that in the peak summertime tourist opt for public transport such a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... happen in the rest of the year. Due to a small number of people for the rest of the year, people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2474.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26382978723 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83358328015 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459574468085 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8471885558 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.565217391 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4347826087 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285198703353 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08784365022 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120384063715 0.0701772020484 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176075379837 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428951679653 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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