Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, today, the ability of young people in making good decisions about their lives is much better rather than the past. It is because they can practice decision making from their childhood by having more liberal parents rather than the past. Moreover, today, more social interactions lead young people to make better decisions. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, today, parents are more liberal rather than the past. As a result, they let their children make their decisions in a lot of cases, which are related to them. On the contrary, parents didn’t let children make their decisions in the past and they did this job by themselves. One simple example to illustrate this concept is choosing and buying children’s clothes. In the past, their clothes were chosen by parents, not by the children themselves. Parents went to stores and bought clothes for their children according to their taste. By contrast, nowadays, parents let children choose their cloth themselves. Thus, they can practice decision making from the early years of their life. As a result, they can improve themselves in decision making by time passage and accomplish making more important decisions in the later years through these practices.
Second, having more friends and more social interactions can help young people to make better decisions. In the past, social interactions were limited to families, neighbors, and close friends. However, today, you can make friends through social networks as many as you want. You can choose your friend according to his career or specialty by these means. Moreover, you can easily consult them to make better decisions because they are more available rather than the past. It will be practical just by taking your phone or opening your laptop and sending them an e-mail. Once, I was suspicious about enrolling in a drawing class, which was related to my career. To solve the problem, I send an e-mail to all of my social friends, who had the same career. When they sent their opinion to me, I found out most of them agreed with enrolling in that class. Thus, I made my decision and enrolled in it. After several months, I realized that enrolling in that class improved my ability in my career and I could do my best. Hence, having more friends in social networks and gaining their advices can help young people to make better decisions than before.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that today, young people can make much better decisions rather than before.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01647058824 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51720721831 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4172538651 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3461538462 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399498997658 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124880362162 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921820613 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283953129668 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699591237411 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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