Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It’s a waste of money for the government to fund space travel or space exploration.
Give specific examples and details to support your answer.
For the last decades, man has been trying to explore the secrets of the universe more and more. Most ordinary people wonder whether allocating some budget to support space exploration and space travel by governments is a wise job or not. In my opinion, lots of other important problems are available in our societies that governments should consider them as their priorities rather than funding space exploration. From all of those critical problems in societies, I want to mention poverty and improper medical facilities in the following paragraphs.
First of all, when a lot of people have challenges to provide their daily needs, spending such huge money on space exploration is wastefulness. Not only in developing countries but also in developed ones, lots of people still suffer from poverty. Thereby, it’s normal that they don’t care about space subjects. For example, consider a country having a lot of poor people. Because the money of the country belongs to everyone, poor people expect to get some help from the government. Rather, the country spends a lot on a space project, launching a new spacecraft into space. Consequently, poor people will get angry with the government because it has neglected them and their serious problems. As a result, they may revolt and destroy public facilities and create a lot of costs for the government. Hence, I think that helping poor people to provide their critical needs is more important rather than spending money on space exploration.
As the second reason, knowing about the space through more researches and spending more money would be an irrational job if there are not enough medical facilities for people in society. All the people of society deserve to be healthy. Although a basic need, it may be affected negatively by spending more on other unnecessary things such as exploring and traveling to space. For instance, I remember when my mom was ill, doctors told us that they can not cure her because they don’t have one of the necessary instruments for her operation. In fact, the cost of importing that instrument from another country was too high. One day, when I was crying for my mom’s bad condition, I heard in the news that the government had funded a project for traveling to space. Consequently, I got angry with the government so much. Had the government spent just a little portion of that money to import medical facilities, my mom would have healed in turn. Instead, a lot of money was wasted for an unnecessary thing. Hence, I think, providing the medical facilities to guarantee people’s health is much more important rather than spending money on space researches.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that hardly can all people of society be happy about the new exploration in space while they suffer from more important things in their life. Therefore, I believe that governments should allocate their money to solve the daily problems of people at first.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05668016194 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77768791709 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481781376518 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.010242623 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.92 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.76 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239229475229 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753982232969 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552310508195 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154976643762 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563277198629 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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