The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
In the article , Dr.karp avidly states that his team of graduate will establish accurate understanding of rearing traditions. His confidence came from that fact that his teams interview centered method is unique. However, the conclusion drawn by the anthropologists might hold water,it rest on various unwarranted assumptions, if not sustained, dramatically weakens the persuasiveness of the argument.Before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, two questions must be answered.
Firstly, what if Dr.Karp interviewed group of children who were brought up differently? This might be the case that he interviewed a heretic group.That particular group might have been brought up by their biological parents different from others.As an instance, we can look around our surroundings. Each family has a unique style of raising up kids.No judgement can be made about the method as this is a personal preference.So, if the above stated scenario has merit, the conclusion drawn in the argument weakens.
Secondly, what if Dr. Karp's method of interview proves insufficient. In the article he asserted that his team of graduates will be able to establish a better understanding of rearing traditions.This not certain that his team will succeed surely.Experimental based methods are unpredictable.Until the results comes out, its accuracy cant be decided.If the above is true,the argument doesn't hold water.
In conclusion,the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions.If the author is able to answer two questions above and offer evidence,then it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the proposed recommendation that Dr. karps team will succeed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 275 350
No. of Characters: 1418 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.072 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.156 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.027 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.125 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
In the article , Dr.karp avidly states that his team of ...
^^
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... by the anthropologists might hold water,it rest on various unwarranted assumptions...
^^^
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rests'?
Suggestion: rests
...the anthropologists might hold water,it rest on various unwarranted assumptions, if ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
...kens the persuasiveness of the argument.Before this recommendation can be properly eva...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... must be answered. Firstly, what if Dr.Karp interviewed group of children wh...
^^
Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
... be answered. Firstly, what if Dr.Karp interviewed group of children who were ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...ase that he interviewed a heretic group.That particular group might have been brough...
^^^^
Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...iological parents different from others.As an instance, we can look around our sur...
^^
Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: No
...y has a unique style of raising up kids.No judgement can be made about the method ...
^^
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...method as this is a personal preference.So, if the above stated scenario has merit...
^^
Line 9, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ter understanding of rearing traditions.This not certain that his team will succeed ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Experimental
...rtain that his team will succeed surely.Experimental based methods are unpredictable.Until t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 291, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Until
...imental based methods are unpredictable.Until the results comes out, its accuracy can...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'results'' or 'result's'?
Suggestion: results'; result's
...sed methods are unpredictable.Until the results comes out, its accuracy cant be decided...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 333, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...til the results comes out, its accuracy cant be decided.If the above is true,the arg...
^^^^
Line 9, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...comes out, its accuracy cant be decided.If the above is true,the argument doesnt h...
^^
Line 9, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...acy cant be decided.If the above is true,the argument doesnt hold water. In con...
^^^^
Line 9, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cided.If the above is true,the argument doesnt hold water. In conclusion,the argu...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...nt doesnt hold water. In conclusion,the argument as it stands now, is considera...
^^^^
Line 13, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ance on several unwarranted assumptions.If the author is able to answer two questi...
^^
Line 13, column 190, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
...r two questions above and offer evidence,then it will be possible to fully evaluate t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69111969112 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52298244751 2.78398813304 127% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602316602317 0.468620217663 129% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.7265911172 57.8364921388 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.777777778 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7777777778 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132627886049 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670976037777 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437460100529 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797650430097 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293083428669 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.5979740519 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.