Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.
While the author of the passage does make certain valid arguments regarding Kalinese statues, the evidence the author puts forward lacks a lot of necessary information, causing the author to overextrapolate information, while other arguments made by the author is rift with assumptions and is not backed up with any sort of evidence.
The author mentions that archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads of hands on Kali. However, in order to produce a life-size clay statue, the sculptor would have needed more molds that just molds for the head and the hands. The sculptor would have need molds for the feet, torso, chest etcetra as well. The author is implying that having molds for certain body parts is what has helped the Kalises to produce such life-like depicts, however, having molds for just the head and the hands could result in a disproportionate clay statue if there were no other molds involved and the author cannot assume there were as none have been found.
The author says that the discovery of molds explains by the Kalises minatures are abtract figures. However, this extrapolation is not supported by any of the evidence. The author could strengthen his or her argument by dating the miniatures, the mold and the life-size clay figures. It could be possible that the Kalinese first started off producing small miniature models and then as time progressed, started to produce larger, life-size clay figures. The evidence here is insufficient to make reasonable conclusions about this. In addition to this, perhaps the art form was such that the miniature statues were meant to be abstract and had nothing to do with the existence of having molds.
In addition to this, having found few sculpting tool does not necessarily mean that the Kalinese used fewer tools. It could be that archaeologists just have not found any tools or that the tools were made of a sort of material that caused them to degrade and so they have not been found.
The statement of relating the discovery of the molds to the value of the figures is not supported by any of the evidence presented here. There seems to be not logical connection between value and the use of molds to create statues. Perhaps collectors value the statues for their alikeness and aesthetic value rather than how the Kalinese managed to create such a statue. Perhaps the collectors collect them for their historical value. We cannot make conclusions based on the evidence presented here. Furthermore, there is nothing to suggest that the value of the miniatures would increase if the value of life-sized statues fall. It is not necessarily true that collectors would swap from life-sized statues to miniatures, they might as well switch to collecting from another island or era all together.
All in all, the evidence presented by the author here is not convincing enough to draw the sorts of conclusions made by the author. The passage can be strengthen by including stronger, more detailed evidence.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2444 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.898 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...me there were as none have been found. The author says that the discovery of molds...
^^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: AS_TIME_PROGRESSED[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as time passed'?
Suggestion: as time passed
...oducing small miniature models and then as time progressed, started to produce larger, life-size c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, then, well, while, in addition, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00801603206 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67692567333 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440881763527 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6713112724 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.590909091 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276455097269 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773404284959 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715711753138 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121798492584 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831964663213 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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