Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest wha

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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Madam

I am writing this is response to the letter I received from you yesterday regarding the children school trip. I am glad to know that you are also involving parents along with kids in extra-curricular activities and giving them some time off from busy routine and giving them a chance to spen some quality time with children. I would like to volunteer my services for this trip and will be more than happy to contribute any help that I could on my part.

I am sure that I will be of great help as I have worked as a school teacher a few years back and I was very good at handling kids. Moreover, some of the children are already familiar with me since they are friends with my kids and we have already met. My background as a history teacher will also prove helpful as I can provide students with the information about places they will visit and hence have an insight of the historical backgrounf of the spots they are getting a chance to know.
I would like to ask a few question that would help me plan the trip. Can you give me a roadmap of the places we will visit and about the accommodation that will be provided for parents.

Yours truly,

Aqsa Afzal

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...school trip. I am glad to know that you are also involving parents along with kids in extra-curric...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o spen some quality time with children. I would like to volunteer my services for...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...te any help that I could on my part. I am sure that I will be of great help as...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...s very good at handling kids. Moreover, some of the children are already familiar with me s...
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Line 6, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'few questions'.
Suggestion: few questions
... chance to know. I would like to ask a few question that would help me plan the trip. Can y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, moreover, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 220.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38181818182 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43402194113 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540909090909 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0191226857 44.8134815571 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.111111111 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 16.8248392259 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 4.34317383033 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152630012356 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705993492046 0.0766984524023 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431845032712 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10305819641 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344915690673 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.42 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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