The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
Throughout history, societies have always tried to develop and make their country better. It is established beyond doubt that preparing young people is of great importance for prospering of society in the future and young people are the future key of specific country. So, a controversial question which is often raised in this area is whether preparing young people for leadership in various fields is dependent to sense of cooperation or competition. I personally believe that both of these characteristics are important and I agree with the statement to some extent. In the following paragraphs, I am going to elaborate on my perspective.
The first reason why I advocate my point of view lies in the fact that people in the society are not alone and live together. thus, every individual should learn to cooperate with other people that can live better in the society. thus, I assume that not only should people have a sense of cooperation for guiding government, industry, or other fields, but also they should use of this attribute in every step of their living.
Another issue which should be taken into consideration is that people can better solve the problems with sharing their ideas, therefore, they can sooner reach to success and flourishment. thus, the more people can share their ideas and cooperate with each other, the more they can succeed. As an instance, consider a corporation which its all employees are friendly and love each other and share their ideas, this company can solve better their difficulties comparison to other company without sense of cooperation.
On the other hand, I am convinced that competition is significant and due to its paramount importance, society must learn its young people and even its children to compete with each other, but, in a correct and right way.
By way of encapsulating this notion, based on the arguments explored above, and with all due respect to the people who have opposite idea of mine, I once again reaffirm my position that every individual in a society should be taught both sense of cooperation and competition in order to better growing of a country and also, better succession in their own way. but, that was the story in a nutshell; actually, there are a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7610775825 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496221662469 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.5718503925 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.785714286 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3571428571 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258211869667 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890276882938 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690869281748 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146479391777 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607964792494 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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