The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the editorial letter from central plaza owner, it is stated that there should be restriction on skateboarding in order to gain original profit level, which causes decrease in their business due to dramatic increase in number of skateboarding .The owner of plaza have come to this conclusion based on the evidence of increase in amount of litter as well as in vandalism. However before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, does we could use the situation before two year as a generalization for other period of time? In the other words, did we consider the some changes occur during these two year period? It is possible that central plaza before two years ago has different scenario as compared to now. Perhaps there must be changes in the population size during this two year. There might play important role for deciding the number of shopper who goes central plaza for shopping. Reason behind decrease in number of shopper is mainly due to nature of most of people reluctant to shopping rather than due to skateboarding. If either of these scenarios proves true, then the assertion of the owners significantly degraded.
Secondly, does increase in number of litter and vandalism was only due to increase in number of skateboarding? Does increase in number of skateboarding solely responsible for limitation of plaza business? Perhaps there might be other reason behind decrease in number of shoppers in central plaza. For example there might be decrease in quality of product and increase in price of commodities which result in low number of customer or shopper and ultimately in revenue of central plaza. Perhaps increase in litter is mainly due to ignorance of government officials who was appointed for managing the litter in proper time. Vandalism may attract only marginal shopper who r economically poor. Plaza shopper may be economically affluent. Without addressing these issues owners might not get expected business level even though skateboarding is prohibited.
Thirdly, does skateboarding only causes negative impact on business of central plaza? There might be positive impact on business of central plaza. Owner might neglect about the gathering of people and gathering of people may increases the number of shopper in recent year which might not get noticed by owners of plaza. Despite of increasing number of skateboarding, it might play important role in advertisement of plaza thought directly as well as indirectly. Perhaps, there may be play positive role for the business of plaza by skateboarders but due to other some reason there is decrease in shopper number in central plaza. Without answering these questions, owners maynot get expected result after prohibiting skateboarding near plaza.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions, if the owner of plaza is able to answer to three questions above and offer more evidence , then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation prohibit the skateboarding around central plaza.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2585 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.16 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.848 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.148 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...atic increase in number of skateboarding .The owner of plaza have come to this con...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ic increase in number of skateboarding .The owner of plaza have come to this conclu...
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Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...vidence of increase in amount of litter as well as in vandalism. However before th...
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Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ount of litter as well as in vandalism. However before this recommendation can be prope...
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Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: DOES_YOU[2]
Message: Did you mean 'do'? 'does' is only used for the third person singular (he/she/it).
Suggestion: do
...stion must be answered. First of all, does we could use the situation before two y...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... two year as a generalization for other period of time? In the other words, did we consider th...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...In the other words, did we consider the some changes occur during these two year per...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...r of shopper is mainly due to nature of most of people reluctant to shopping rather than due t...
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Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... several unwarranted assumptions, if the owner of plaza is able to answer to thre...
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Line 9, column 212, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... questions above and offer more evidence , then it will be possible to fully evalu...
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Line 9, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dation prohibit the skateboarding around central plaza.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 96.0 55.5748502994 173% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 501.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28343313373 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90801722511 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445109780439 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 838.8 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.9358265213 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.291666667 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329106808138 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114881280619 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758502085021 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208444545536 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568183511447 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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