The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Our society is becoming increasingly more open and complexed. With the great advancement of technology, the cooperation of people from different parts of the world and different fields are becoming more and more common. A sense of cooperation will be highly pursued. Therefore, it totally makes sense that the prompt says the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. While cooperation is important, a sense of competition is also needed for a leader.

Our world is becoming increasingly integrated and complexed. The scale of people of different origins to work together has reached an unprecedented level. This requires a leader that has a strong sense of cooperation, can work with different people and know how to make out of the most of people that work together. If a leader fails to have a strong sense of cooperation, a project will not be able to fully take advantage of the talents that are available and thus the team will not be able to reach the potential it should be able to reach.

In addition, the overwhelming numbers of projects that need the cooperation of different fields also have been never been seen before. In order to be the leader for a project that requires the cooperation of different fields, the leader must be able to work together with people with different sets of skills and knowledge.

However, in this increasingly competitive world, a leader's strong sense of competition should not be ignored. Surely cooperation is the key to success, healthy competition helps in getting the most of the potential of people working in a project and may enable the team to reach a level that no one expected. Steve Jobs is famous in pushing his employees very hard to the level that makes them feel uncomfortable, but his competitive nature makes his company excels in tough competitions.

In summary, a good leader certainly needs a great sense of cooperation, being able to unite more people together itself is one of the most important value a leader should have in this increasingly integrated world. However, a strong sense of competition is also needed for a good leader and a leader with both strong senses of cooperation and competition will be lead people to a promising future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... people and know how to make out of the most of people that work together. If a leader fails t...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have never been
...he cooperation of different fields also have been never been seen before. In order to be the le...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a leader' or simply 'leaders'?
Suggestion: a leader; leaders
...in this increasingly competitive world, a leaders strong sense of competition should not ...
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Line 7, column 490, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s company excels in tough competitions. In summary, a good leader certainly need...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94444444444 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93031591333 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411616161616 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4564667757 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.375 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296237171257 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110955233253 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135834076749 0.0758088955206 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183520080289 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159000803565 0.0667264976115 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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