The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?
There are different ways in which schools can use their budget from academic to extracurricular uses. Personally, I believe that it is beneficial for the university to increase their spendings on sports and athletic activities. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in my subsequent essay.
Firstly, a university that maintains a balance between academic resources and athletic environments would be more attractive, which allows the school to attract more undergraduate students. Schools, especially universities, tend to focus a lot on academic aspects such as the library, so there tends to be an imbalance between funding spent on sports and studies. In addition, the university's libraries are generally organized and funded enough so there should be more scholarships and support on sports facilities. When students visit the school or read the university on the homepage, they not just view the study related aspects, but also the university’s sports facilities and how well they promote athletics. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About four years ago, when I was deciding which middle and high school to attend to, I frequently visited several schools to determine which school seems to fit my interests. The school that I currently attend appealed to me the most because the academic support was great, but the school encouraged students to participate in extracurricular activities and clubs. The facility was well organized and there was sports funding as well. Therefore, because I got to know how this school encourages both studies and athletic clubs instead of just focusing on libraries and academic-related facilities that most schools tend to focus on, I found the school appealing. If the university hadn’t put forth on sports and athletic programs, I wouldn’t have attended a school that promotes extracurricular activities and engages in sports.
Secondly, a well-equipped gym will appeal to many students in the university, which allows them to use the facility to release their daily stress. Many university students are constantly pressured to succeed academically, so they should have time to rest and temporarily get away from the studying environment. Drawing from my experience, after I come back home once school finishes, I often go jogging around the park to have time to forget about academic-related topics and refresh my mind. Going to the gym and working out in general is an effective way to relieve stress, and there has been research showing that engaging in sports is advantageous to both physical and mental health. If I didn’t schedule some time to play athletic activities, I wouldn’t have been able to release my worries and concerns I have, which would lead to adverse effects if not relieved.
In conclusion, I firmly argue that funding on sports and athletic environments over libraries is critically important. This is because having a well-equipped gym and resources is one of the appealing points seen from high school students, and because participating in sports is able to lessen the students’ stress that they accumulate every day.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2643.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29659318637 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07214232771 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50501002004 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5248390002 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.15 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.95 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219815221184 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774846570647 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535335217987 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142432023356 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324998671857 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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