A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author states that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. This is based on the premise that children in Himalayan region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay as compared to children in the United states. At first this explanation may sound logical and true. But there are several other scenario in which the given explanations can be viewed.
Firstly, the authors says that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in nepal have lower level of tooth decay as compared to children in United States. There can be a possibility - like the children in nepal had recently visited dental care and children of United States had not visited. So it may have happen that less number of tooth decay problems have reported in United States than Nepal. There is no evidence given about the health or any medical history of dental checkup before testing the children. If the point stated is True that it rivals the argument given by the author.
Secondly, the author says that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care. It may happen that due to less visiting of the dental clinic the number of people reported tooth decay is less as compared to the children in United States. For example, Children in United states csn visit the dental clinic for a regular checkup also, and due to this regular visit there are high chances to find a patient with tooth decay. As in nepal children visit very few times to the dental clinic, there can be a possibility that a child may be having a tooth decay but he has not visited the clinic so that data is not recorded.
In conclusion, now the above explanations given by the authors are flawed and not interpreted properly as there can be an alternative explanation also like - 1) There is not sufficient data about the children who recently had tooth decay cured and then taken into survey, 2) Children visiting dental clinic does not necessary mean he has a tooth decay , it can be a regular check also. It can also be viewed as people not visiting a clinic and having a tooth decay are not recorded in the survey.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.588 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.314 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.349 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'scenarios'?
Suggestion: scenarios
...l and true. But there are several other scenario in which the given explanations can be ...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted States. There can be a possibility - like the children in nepal had recently...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ates. There can be a possibility - like the children in nepal had recently visit...
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Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
... States had not visited. So it may have happen that less number of tooth decay problem...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...al checkup before testing the children. If the point stated is True that it rivals...
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Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... of people reported tooth decay is less as compared to the children in United Stat...
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Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... not necessary mean he has a tooth decay , it can be a regular check also. It can ...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...tooth decay , it can be a regular check also. It can also be viewed as people not vi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69680851064 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37595977883 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401595744681 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6548889512 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.733333333 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367782661434 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155896616961 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151174128531 0.0701772020484 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266762874145 0.128457276422 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118601003129 0.0628817314937 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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