The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people

Nowadays, as it commonly sensed, celebrities and entertainers and their effect especially on young people play a vital role especially when it comes to things like fashion, habits and beliefs. Although some people believe that famous people have impact on all ages of people all around the world, I assert that this influence is more on young people than old ones.

The first reason why I am supporting this view lies in the fact that young people have less experience in comparison with old people. Especially teenagers so when they start to like a celebrity, they think that whatever their beloved celebrity’s opinion is might be true. In contrast, old people whom have many experience from their life, know that being a celebrity or entertainer does not necessarily means they know everything properly.

The other point worth mentioning is that younger people are more emotionally under control. They get excited more easily are more prone to do think silly. This attribute will make them to act or think overwhelming, so the probability of getting influenced by their idols is higher.

Finally, it is observed that when people are young they are more enthusiast to have a role model and consequently whatever their idols think will be that young person belief too.

To wrap up, taking all aforementioned reasons, it could be authentically concluded that from my vantage point, famous people beliefs are more important for younger people since these young people are more emotional and less experienced. Also they desire to have an idol more that old people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experience', 'a good deal of experience'.
Suggestion: much experience; a good deal of experience
...true. In contrast, old people whom have many experience from their life, know that being a cele...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...ity or entertainer does not necessarily means they know everything properly. The ...
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Line 9, column 238, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...re more emotional and less experienced. Also they desire to have an idol more that o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, so, then, thus, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 258.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11627906977 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67013475581 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573643410853 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.235016128 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4545454545 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380999141986 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144665883446 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852753756643 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215356279218 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754394610076 0.0645574589148 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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