Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position
To be successful, hardworking has a significant key. However, to a great degree, I can't entirely agree with the idea that the only factor to success is hardworking. I believe that besides of it, the other agents help a person to achieve success, including luck. In the following paragraph, I will illustrate my persuasive reasons in this respect.
The first and foremost reason, despite being industrious, is having equipment and a suitable environment. In other words, the more a person takes advantage of facilities, the more the chance of reaching one's goals increases. As a bright example, I would like to make a comparison between the three world countries and the developed ones. It has been estimated that the rate of successful peoples in first world countries became more than the poor ones. When we focus on this problem, we can figure out that the main reason is that the people living in high-class countries use the existing equipment in every field, such as education, including the novel education tools, the internet, and so forth. In contrast, in some of the deprived regains of low-level countries, there are no mentioned items. As a result, the one who born in a developed country and in a wealthy family is a lucky person, so in case of using them, he or she could achieve success comfortably.
Secondly, I firmly believe that having an expert leader or advisor has a strong effect on achieving the best. Because before us, there have been many experienced individuals who are so familiar with how to do a specific activity, he or she is the best person to get help. Take me as a brilliant example of it. Three years ago, when I was conducting my master thesis, I had a distinguished advisor. He was so professional and elite in his fields of interest. Therefore, thanks to his advice, I could complete my thesis, and I could receive an A-grade in my research. It is true that I was so serious in my doing tasks, but I am sure that if he had not given his guidelines, I would never have achieved my ambition in my major. In this case, having an appropriate leader is another factor in the way to success in spite of working hard. This is somewhat connected to luck or decision-making power in selecting a leader or advisor.
In conclusion, I believe that only working hard does not guarantees to be successful. This is because using all current facilities and getting the help of an adept one make a good impact on success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: some
...nternet, and so forth. In contrast, in some of the deprived regains of low-level countries...
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'guarantee'
Suggestion: guarantee
...believe that only working hard does not guarantees to be successful. This is because using...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69534883721 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82763252187 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544186046512 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9137372292 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7727272727 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173909493268 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437480342753 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417068496275 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107020882251 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293329060427 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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