Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that suggesting money for teenagers is not a practical idea to force them to gain a high score in their courses in schools. However, some believe that encouraging children to study hard in exchange for money helps them gain high marks. I. to a great degree, agree with the second group of people. I contend that not only do they study hard but also they will be active during their lives. therefore, in the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my reasons.
The first and foremost reason is that determining an award and prize not only encourages young people to try the best but also the fruit of this action will have benefits for them in the future. To put it another way, the low age children do not have any clear perspective of the future. for this reason and some other reasons, the parents with the awareness of this try to encourage their children to study hard by proposing money for them. take my brother as an example, when he was in 13, he did not pay attention to the school and homework, while he had a strong feeling to make money in the short of time. therefore, my father decided to pay money in exchange for bringing marks A during secondary school. Hence, doing this action, not only he could increase his educational level in school, but also we could guarantee his future work. To be short my long story, he is a manager in a big company in our town.
The second reason which should be taken into consideration is that due to the fact that the time of school is far longer, sometimes the children got tired and no longer they like to study hard and carry out their homework, so their mark levels drop from A to B, in sometimes to C. In this case, parents must find a motive to turn out children to the normal situation and return into the active person. it is estimated that offering money, or even likable thing for them can play a major role to improve this condition. For example, when I was a first-grade school, something my teacher would propose us in exchange for getting high marks in the midterm. Thus, my mark would be the highest in the class because I was crazy about taking the prize.
In short, all of the mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that in some cases the parent can use this method to improve the situation an urn into far better condition. As a result, it is necessary to say that, is the case the parent feel this method works for their children, it strongly will be recommended.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in short, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 24.0651302605 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 453.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49006622517 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39947218733 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503311258278 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3279068015 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.052631579 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8421052632 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360110458305 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101468005157 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682961159857 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209840763563 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501414808788 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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