People in today s world have become too dependent on automobiles

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People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles.

After the industrial revolution, people have been found a strong tendency to use vehicles and other modern products. To a great degree, I agree with the idea that the usage of cars by people of societies has been dramatically increasing year by year during these recent decades. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my persuasive reasons in this respect.
First, the demand and supply determine how many products, especially automobiles, must be manufactured. Due to the fact that the lifestyle of societies has been sophisticated with time, and they have to communicate long distances, they need to have a personal car. Besides, the owners of car manufacturers have been trying to produce a variety of vehicles for people. My experience is a compelling example of this. About three years ago, I worked for an electrical power company located 50 kilometers far away from my home. Also, I had to go shopping for that company every day. Therefore, I was forced to communicate a long distance every working day. Thus, I significantly needed to have a personal car. Since I have a little money, I could purchase one car to handle my activities because of the existing less expensive vehicles. Had not I provided that transporting machine, I would never have managed my duties in my job.
Secondly, people's welfare level has been dramatically going up, and tend to have a personal automobile. Moreover, because of the low quality of public transportation, they are not eager to use them. Take my country as an excellent case in point. There are some traffic limitations in the big sites: the cars with even plaques have the right to come into downtowns in even days and vice versus. While there is such strict regulation to avoid traffic congestion and reduce air pollutions, some rich people have two kinds of cars to use personal automobiles every day. Furthermore, since there is plenty of population in these mega towns, utilizing public transportation in the rush hours is far annoying. As a result, most societies have been meaning to afford a private car by themselves.
In conclusion, I believe that people are more reliant on automobiles. This is because the demand for having care is increasing, and because individuals like to have their own cars for convenience purposes.

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Average: 7.1 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00523560209 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95157503395 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573298429319 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1922634806 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9090909091 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3636363636 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149299545432 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440215175877 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424404161356 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101382055218 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189697403122 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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