Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities

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Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

The author infers that society needs not to make efforts if the potential extinction is not caused by human activities. Some people views that extinction is sort of natural evolution and progress so human should not interfere in. However, I disagree with the statement in that nature is origin of creative inspirations. What is more human is deeply dependent to nature. Therefore society should make efforts to save endangered species no matter what their immediate cause is.

Some people argue that extinction is sort of natural evolution and people should not interfere in natural progress. For example, let us consider dinosaur's extinction. No one is sure what is the cause of extinction, but no one doubts that it was natural earth progress. Since people should not meddle in these natural progress, they believe people should not save endangered species which is not caused by human activities. Even though I admit that human should not interfere in natural progress, I believe that all endangered species is the result of human activities at least in indirect form. Human causes enormous natural change too quickly. For example, let us consider Ice age which is regarded as one of the biggest natural change in history. Ice age was progressed slowly and changed earth climate for thousands of years. However human behaviors cause bigger event such as global warming, air pollution, etc only in shorter period: hundreds of years. Since ecosystem is highly convoluted and deeply related with each other small affect in one breed could spanned to all breed. Therefore I believe that human is responsible for all endangered species and should make efforts to save them.

Secondly, we should consider that great innovation was usually brought from nature. Ecosystem provides humans a great inspiration. For example, consider Velcro one of the greatest invention in history. Velcro was invented by a scientist who was inspired by Bur. Likewise let us consider full-length swim suit. Full-length swim suit was designed by imitating a shark's skin. Without those examples, there are many inspiration that nature presents. Therefore saving endangered species without discriminating whether it was caused by human or not may provide humans a great opportunity to make a creative invention.

What is more, we also consider the fact that human is deeply dependent to ecosystem diversity. Human can not survive solely. Diverse ecosystem and many species provide human a convenience. Twenty nine percent of fuels people using are from trees. Fifty eight percent of medicines is manufactured by using a natural substances. Seventy five percent of crops that people consume needs insects to raise properly. As we all know, ecosystem is highly intricate and extinction of only one species can induce tremendous effect on ecosystem. Society should save endangered species at least for their own sake.

To sum up, I affirm that saving endangered species is not only essential for human survival but also will provide great insight to people. What is more, since human's activity is causing enormous effect on ecosystem, it is foolish to separate species that is being endangered by human behaviors from others. In conclusion, I disagree with the author who is stating human's job is saving endangered species only if the potential extinction is the result of human.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for example, in conclusion, in short, sort of, such as, to sum up, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2824.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24907063197 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67860827729 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434944237918 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 902.7 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4605177887 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6857142857 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3714285714 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431839837353 0.243740707755 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10826332846 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126236743126 0.0758088955206 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280026545389 0.150359130593 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106721763825 0.0667264976115 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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