The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager One month ago all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one third | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.

"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author in the letter concludes that restricting the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow is germane and would be more lucrative than before. However, the owner of the apartment building makes several critical flaws which will be discussed below in detail. For such claim to be perceived plausible, the author would have to eliminate such problems.
First of all, the author claims that it is okay to restrict the water flow of the other floors because there were only few complaints about the change of the water pressure. However, the reason there were trivial amount of complaints could be because the tenants simply moved out without complaining about it. Or else, they could be getting prepared of moving out if the low water pressure problem is not solved without filing a complaint. Furthermore, the author needs clarify the number of complaints to claim that there were only a few. If there are in total 5 residents living in the building and had three complaints, even though the three complaints seem a frivolous amount, considering the total number of residents, the complaints are actually coming from majority of the residents.
In addition, since the actual readings of water usage is not available, it is wrong for the author to contend that the change of water flow will result in increase in profits. Even though the water flow declined, the residents could have been using the water longer than before which would actually be the same amount of water being used from before. The author should have verified information to use such reason to claim that it is more profitable to restrict the water flow.
Most importantly, the author makes a mistake of overgeneralization. Even if the water usage decreased in the first five floors of the building, this does not mean that it would be the same for the other floors. The other fifteen floors of the building could use a lot more water after the change has been adjusted. The residents of the first five floors could have been benign enough to understand the reason why the owner cut off the water flow, however, the other residents may not be okay with the change. Also, the complaints could increase excessively among the other fifteen floors after the restriction has been made.
The letter may seem plausible at first sight, however, with thorough investigation and observing the letter in various point of views, it does not stand a chance of plausibility. For the author to further contend such claim, he/she should clarify the veracity of the information, not make a mistake of overgeneralization, and provide sufficient information. Due to such reasons, the assertion that restricting the water flow throughout the building would lead to more profit does not seem germane.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Few
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Suggestion: First
... have used water longer than before 3. first five floors -> all floorsgeneralization...
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...coming from majority of the residents. In addition, since the actual readings o...
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...profitable to restrict the water flow. Most importantly, the author makes a mis...
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...s after the restriction has been made. The letter may seem plausible at first s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, third, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2460.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03067484663 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74731194375 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419222903885 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2773261402 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.142857143 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202330672549 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674670095506 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696808634557 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103280780333 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634066951958 0.0628817314937 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, third, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments