A company wants to use money to help employees work better. One way is to improve the technology equipment (computers, printers) used by employees and improve efficiency. Another way is to redesign the space to make the working environment more comfortable and have more meeting rooms for discussion. Which way do you recommend? Why?
Nowadays, the development of employees’ efficiency has become the main goal of all companies and different strategies have been proposed. While there are some people maintaining that improving the technology devices has played a crucial role in increasing efficiency, there are others holding the view that changing the environment’s design is the best way to reach the goal. As far as I am concerned, redesign the space is the best strategy to improve employees’ productivity in that not only has it direct effects on people’s mood but also it can increase people’s health.
The first reason which should be stated here is that people’s mood can change their efficiency considerably. Redesign the space of the company will have effectss on their moods. For instance, by using some colors such as blue and green in the new environment people feel calm. Moreover, with using an air-conditioned and providing enough light, employees feel fresh. Therefore, their productivity will increase astoundingly. An experiment was done in the factories, researchers found that changing the light influenced the employee’s efficiency. When plenty of light bulbs were provided, a company could produce 50 goods in each hour. However, when the number of light bulbs decreases, it was just 30 comedies in each hour.
Furthermore, the decoration of the environment influences employees' mental and physical health. To begin with, using comfortable furniture can develop people’s productivity. For example, when a clerk has a comfortable chair that is compatible with his agronomy, he feels better and his productivity will increase. Besides, it hinders some physical pain. In addition, the decoration of the space can improve people’s concentration. As a result, they can use all of their potential in the workplace. Take the case of a clerk who has to work in a messy space. The disordered environment can distract him easily, and noises in the space do not let him concentrate on his duties. Thus, his efficiency will decline.
To summarize, redesigning the environment is an efficient method to improve employees’ productivity in that space will affect people’s mood and their health. It is highly recommended that companies provide the necessary facilities for their employees to improve the quality of their performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43131868132 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14259177201 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532967032967 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.5173398129 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8636363636 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86363636364 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262755777308 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726594876024 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484373380643 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167622009812 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344166730748 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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