Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, continuing studies has become a controversial issue among people. While there are some people maintaining that pupils should continue their studies after they finish their schools, there are some others holding the view that it is better they have a break and then start their university. As far as I am concerned, it is beneficial for students to take a rest after they finish their schools in that not only can they get a plethora of experience during this time but also they can use this break to rest from boring they of schools.
The first reason which should be stated here is that students who decide to go to the universities need a majority of experience to help them to select the best major they are interested in and have a better performance in the university. Taking some years off the schools and universities will help them to become familiar with themselves more and identify their true interest. In addition, they will learn a lot through work in places and communicate with different persons or travel around the world. In fact, working and traveling helps children to improve their skills such as communication skills, time management, and so on. Take the case of a software engineer student who worked in a company as an internship before attending a university. Without doubt, he chooses this major through identification he gained from himself when he worked in the company. So, he will be much more interested than other students who choose this major without knowing about it. Moreover, he learned how to communicate with other persons and how to use his time more productively. As a result, he will be much more successful.
Furthermore, students need some rest after years of studies. Taking a break will help them to become refresh and continue their studies more productively. Researches have shown the importance of motivation in people’s performance. Undoubtedly, when young people have to study for long years without entertainment or interrupt, they will become frustrated. Thus, their performances are affected considerably. For instance, my brother did not go to the university instantly after he had finished his high school. He decided to take a break and go to a volunteer trip in the Africa. After a year he came back and went to the university. He became really motivated to study and try very hard. He said that that trip and what he had experience gave him a great motivation to become successful and help people who live there. Therefore, his performance was considerably different from other classmates.
To summarize, taking a break between the last year of high school and the start of the university is really beneficial for students. This is because they can gain plenty of experience and rebuilt their interest.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 739, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...at that trip and what he had experience gave him a great motivation to become succes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99139784946 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8334800313 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479569892473 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8630262796 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.84 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190440239552 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562911547908 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440777719636 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125630530557 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144383401876 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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