Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays the world has changed by tremendous speed. People have confronted these changes in different manners. While there are some people maintaining that these changes have adverse effects on their life, there are others holding the view that it is really beneficial to them. As far as I am concerned, it makes people more satisfied than the past in that not only does it make their life easier due to the advance in technology, but also it affords them more opportunities to be healthy.
The first reason which should be stated here is that people life has affected by advance in technology in a positive way. To begin with, in the past, people did not have any free time to feel satisfied or not. They had to work all day only to obtain their essential needs, but now by developing technology most of the works has done by just some click on the smartphone. Thus, people have more time to have entertainment and experience joyful times. To illustrate more, these days most people use the dishwasher, washing machine, microwave and so on which make life easier while in the past most of these works should be done by hand that was really boring. In addition, by providing movies, computer, smartphone, cinema, games, etc. They can experience more fun than the past when none of them were not present.
A furthermore subtle point is that in the past due to the lack of facilities most citizenries were involved with health problems, it makes their life more tedious. Nowadays, developing in people’s life, increase the level of the health of communities a lot. Most diseases will be treated easily and plenty of them disappeared. These changes will be offered more satisfaction. Take the case of a person who lived in the past. He suffered a lot of stress by being a disease of himself or their relatives. Mothers lost their infants easily. While today in order to advances have happened most of these problems disappear. Thus, people feel more comfortable than the past.
To summarize, people feel more satisfaction nowadays due to the advance in technology and enhancement in people’s health. Who can compare the difficulties people were dealing with many years ago with enormous fun and enjoyments people are offered today?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ves. Mothers lost their infants easily. While today in order to advances have happene...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, thus, while, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89473684211 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64048492986 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513157894737 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2981883913 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5454545455 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199439047082 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648962213823 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452673032758 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146536609762 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335182971131 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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