Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author in this afforementioned passage argues that to enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors. He goes on to say that the grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement. As a support to his argument, he says that Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. For this logic to be applied true, a few questions need to be addressed impartially, some of which are discussed below.
Firstly, we are dealing with a procedure that was started roughly fifteen years again and continue to be in fray even today. Needless to mention, a lot of things are bound to change within this huge timespan; considering we live a highly fast paced world and education being volatile always. It is quite probable that the rigid system of evaluation, which has remained unchanged, has lost it's effectiveness to a great extent. But, that does not necessarily mean that the entire system is deemed to be flawed. It is quite possible that some improvisations and tweaks in the system can bring about unprecedented changes to the institution as a whole. If that is the case, the author's final conclusion would not hold true since a closer look to the problem could solve the issue rather than completely abolishing it.
Secondly, the author takes into account the notion of the potential employers who say that the grades of the student may be inflated which results in wrong judgment of their true potential. Although this may be the case, it has been assumed that grades are the only basis of judgement on the employer's part. The concept of acquiring soft-skills required for solving real life problems and securing jobs, has not been taken intp account. It is quite possible that the authority of Omega university focuses primarily on the academic calibre, imparting mainly textual knowledge to their students. In this scenario, the students, although abrest with theoritical 'text-book knowledge', would seriously lack in skills that job corporations look for. If this example holds true, then the author should consider rethinking on assessing a candidate's ability on the basis of his grades.
Lastly, the students of Omega University have been compared to the students of their counterpart, Alpha University; the ones able to succeed in obtaining jobs. This is the perfect example of comparing two incomparable units. While we are well informed of the problems prevailing in Omega University, we have no data to assess the quality of the sutdents from Alpha Univeristy. It can be quite possible that apart from restricting their students to focus only on education, the Alpha university aims for an all rounder development- ranging from encouraging them to excel in extra-curricular activities, to arraging workshops in order to train them in in-demand skills like coding and so on. This effort shall lead to an all-round development of the students, thus impressing the employers. It is very important to take into account the real picture before jumping into comparisons of the two units.
The statement that "To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors." is flawed to some extent since the author has missed out on few minute intricacies and relied of a bunch of weakened assumptions. Hence, the validity of this statement would demand much more investigation and analysis. A few more evidences would then help us to evaluate the viability of the null hypothesis.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 285, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...aced world and education being volatile always. It is quite probable that the rigid sy...
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Line 6, column 830, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'candidates'' or 'candidate's'?
Suggestion: candidates'; candidate's
...ould consider rethinking on assessing a candidates ability on the basis of his grades. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, apart from, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3024.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16923076923 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89939121679 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 204.123752495 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 955.8 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0013925746 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.96 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198060851472 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504042835921 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610874871629 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108231798334 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045613164632 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 177.0 98.500998004 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 285, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...aced world and education being volatile always. It is quite probable that the rigid sy...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 830, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'candidates'' or 'candidate's'?
Suggestion: candidates'; candidate's
...ould consider rethinking on assessing a candidates ability on the basis of his grades. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, apart from, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3024.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16923076923 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89939121679 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 204.123752495 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 955.8 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0013925746 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.96 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198060851472 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504042835921 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610874871629 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108231798334 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045613164632 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 177.0 98.500998004 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.