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The following appeared in a health magazine.

"The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The following argument appeared in a health magazine where it is given that the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. The respondent of the people to a recent survey shows that their eating habits conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than before ten years. It has been stated that the sales of food products containing kiran has been increased fourfold times. However, this trend results in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat. Despite all these evidences, the argument does not hold water and it is well supported with evidences in the systematic format in order to make argument viable.

Firstly, the argument states that the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles although the argument fails to provide any lists of healthiest lifestyles. Without proper explanations of healthful lifestyles, it is hard to believe that the citizen of Forsythe has adopted healthiest lifestyles. It is written that their responses to a recent survey results in their eating habits as formulated by a government nutritional recommendation, however the argument fails to provide relevant data regarding the survey as the survey may focus the limited age group who are particularly conscious in their health status rather than whole society including old ages groups as well as juvenile group. It will be possible that the people of Forsythe have started adopting nutrition recommendations ten years ago but the result starts displaying in recent time period in the form of less occurrence of disease, less increase of obesity and their consistency of avoiding junk foods. It will be plausible that the people of Forsythe start doing exercises like running, jogging as well as visiting gyms halls along with nutrition plans as recommended by government which overall results in increase in healthful lifestyles.

Secondly, it is elaborated that the sales of food products containing Kiran, has been increasing by four fold times which results has shown that the cholesterol has been reduced. It is prejudiced to assume that the cholesterol alone results in adopting healthy lifestyles. It is possible that the products which has been increased by four folds, contains Kiran in limited amount which cannot reduce cholesterol in desired amount. The results may be effective due to actions taken by individual in living healthy lifestyles rather than the foods which are assumed to reduce cholesterol in desired amount. It may be possible that the side effects of foods containing Kiran is more and responsible for other health disease rather than responsible for reducing cholesterol.

Thirdly, it is given that the trend of increasing sales of food containing Kiran has resulted in reduce sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest people regularly eats. The result of decreasing sales of food containing sulia, is not known either it contains fatal heart disease by increasing cholesterol level in the body or any other disease. The results must be explicit why people start decreasing consuming sulia products. It may be possible that the company manufacturing Sulia products may mix other compounds to prepare which alone may be detrimental to the health system rather than Sulia.

In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is full of unwarranted assumptions. It should be well supported by evidences in the form of systematic format in order to make argument plausible in the sense that the people of Forsythe starts adopting healthful lifestyles.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the healthiest'.
Suggestion: of the healthiest
...the argument fails to provide any lists of healthiest lifestyles. Without proper explanations...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'adopted the healthiest'.
Suggestion: adopted the healthiest
...elieve that the citizen of Forsythe has adopted healthiest lifestyles. It is written that their re...
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Line 3, column 987, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eir consistency of avoiding junk foods. It will be plausible that the people of Fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as for, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3006.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 566.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3109540636 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8501732614 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409893992933 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 933.3 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.623822576 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.142857143 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9523809524 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294224953497 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963506481128 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123710735707 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174954270367 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150225760169 0.0628817314937 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as for, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments