Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The author concludes that Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors so that the students can secure better jobs. The author provides evidence to it by saying that the professors assign higher grades in order to gain positive feedback from the students. Because of this, potential employers beleive that the grades are highly inflated and thus do not provide authenticity. As a result, omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University.
To begin with, the author assumes that the professors assign higher grades so as to get positive response in evaluation from students. However, the increase in grades may be because of increased efforts that the professors put behind the students. Furthermore, the student who recieves higher grades anyway would provide negative evaluation for the professor as he or she is assigning unfair grades to the students who do not deserve them. Hence, this weakens the author's argument because getting positive evaluation might not be the incentive for assigning higher grades.
Moreover, the author assumes that potential employers recruit students of Alpha university as they believe grades of Omega graduates to be biased. This may not be the case. For example, the employers may be recruiting graduates on the basis of courses offered by both the universities. As a result, the courses offered by Alpha university might be more tilted towards the requirements of the employers. Moreover, the author assumes that employers recruit only on the basis of grades provided. However, the employers might also look at the skills and projects developed by the students. Thus, this weakens author's argument
Lastly, the author assumes that for the past 15 years, the paper pattern, the learning pedagogy and the intellectuals of the students remain more or less the same. This might not always be the case. The students admitted the following year might be brighter than the previous year's students hence weaking the argument. Furthermore, the university might have adopted a new learning pedagogy. For example, the universities may not be focusing more on practical knowledge along with theoretical which previously it was only focusing on theoretical. This might lead to more in depth knowledge about the subject and thus result in higher grades. Not only this, there may be a drastic change in paper pattern making it easier for students to crack the examinations. For example, instead of only subjective questions, the paper now might also offer objective questions which increase the chance of students getting higher grades. Thus, all these points weaken author's argument and hence terminating the evaluation process might not produce the desired effect.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2289 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.238 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.62 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.225 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.473 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hat the professors assign higher grades so as to get positive response in evaluation fro...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t deserve them. Hence, this weakens the authors argument because getting positive evalu...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, furthermore, hence, however, lastly, look, may, moreover, so, then, thus, as to, for example, of course, as a result, more or less, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35697940503 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69865175215 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439359267735 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5502791825 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.782608696 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91304347826 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226024631813 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728338745918 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677912867493 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161584686757 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709899168308 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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