Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Small screen has some content for the babies should not be exist from the first place. In my opinion, T.V. ad should be under control because of having many of them are not proper for children for the following reasons. Firstly, it increases the violence reaction of babies who they watch it over long time. Secondly, it changes our children moral or ethics that we try to raise.
To begin with, small screen causes enormous brutal reactions of our children. There are many advertises that led to violence impression of the baby who watch it. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Twenty years ago, I had been watched the television for several hours a day, even more when I tried to sleep. These hours a day of watching TV gave me addiction to it. Later on, this addiction modified to violence reaction to anyone who tried to stop me. This problem had increased over time until one of my teachers discovered this issue and she talked with my parents about this problem. At the end, this problem took many years with me to could get rid of it. Television damage our childhood by increasing our harmful reaction.
Furthermore, enormous TV advertises are not suitable for any child to watch, Nowadays, when you open the screen, you cannot filter which content for toddler or others for adult. For instance, if you open any cartoon channel, you will find many things that affect our children moral personality such as violence or some unproper sexually content. Moreover, when our children watch these content without care, we will be going to lose the whole generation. There are huge number of ads not proper for child to watch as a result of morality affect of them on our babies’ minds.
In conclusion, television’s ad has several negative effects on our children’s minds for the following reasons. Such as, it increased the violence impression of the child, moreover, it has direct effect of child moral personality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88288288288 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57416394461 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558558558559 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4116439305 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5789473684 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106501177487 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366165816699 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304809529027 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0751351791839 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161289244482 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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