Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to succeed in college:
1 Having access to university tutors who can provide one-to-one instruction for students with difficulties in college study
2 The help and encouragement from the family and friends
3 Excellent teachers in high school who can help students before they go to college
Some people think that having access to university tutors who can provide one-to-one instructions for students is the most important factor for students to succeed in college. Others claim that obtaining some help and encouragement from family and friends is a more ideal approach. Still, others maintain that having excellent teachers in high school who can help students before they go to college is better. As far as I am concerned, I believe that
To begin with, ensuring that students have strong motivation to learn is a judicious method to help students succeed in college, and getting help and encouragement from family and friends can undoubtedly encourage students to learn. For instance, when I was studying at my university, I felt depressed all the time learning math subjects that I dislike, including calculus, linear algebra, and computer programming. Thus, I reached out to my friends for some encouragement, and they all comforted me by stating that a plethora of famous successful people, such as Steve Jobs or Bill Gates, did not perform well in college. After talking with my friends, despite the fact that I sill gained poor grades on some courses, I procured enough motivation to study more diligently. Contrarily, according to my experience, most excellent high school teachers were diabolically strict. Hence, even though I acquired useful math in high school from these teachers, the horrible experiences gained from my high school, such as condemning me for getting terrible grades in my final exam, dissuaded me from enjoying college-level math.
Furthermore, helping students confront difficulties is another approach to help students become successful in college, and providing help and encouragement from friends and family can undoubtedly assist students in addressing difficulties. Take me again as an example. When I was studying in college, I often faced difficulties communicating with my professors due to my introverted personality. Therefore, since my parents understand my personality, they all encourage me to become more extroverted by teaching me communication skills, practicing public speaking without feeling too nervous, etc. As a result, I gained lots of confidence from my parents, and my communication skills improved several years later thanks to their recommendations. Contrarily, I once asked a university tutor how to enhance my relationship with my professor. Nevertheless, my tutor did not realize my extreme introverted personality, so he encourage me to study harder and focus more on my research. After I adopted his suggestions, I figured out that even though I became more knowledgeable in my fields, my lack of proper communication skills still hindered me from talking with my professors successfully. Apparently, since unviersity tutors do not acknowledge the individuality of various students, they usually cannot assist students in resolving difficulties.
In conclusion, I maintain that the most essential factor for pupils to become successful is obtaining help and encouragement from family and friends, considering the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54507337526 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24959626476 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51572327044 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9360891464 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.210526316 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320119713904 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106467058329 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141962716903 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24064677261 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159200309951 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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