TPO40
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Education, the foundation of children's life, has been valued and triggers heated discussion over whether parents should reward their children if they get good grade by giving them money. This kind of reward, in some people's view, is bad for children's development. Contrary to their opinion is my perspective that rewarding children's satsifying grade can help them study better and develop essential skills.
To begin with, it is beneficial to children's study by offer them money for high mark they get in school, as it will encourage kids to study hard. First, money can serve as a motivation for kids to study harder. To be more specific, if they will get money from their parents for their gratifying academic performance, they will be more likely to allocate more time to doing problem sets, reviewing their textbook or discussing with teachers when having questions. Further more, they will pay more attention to the teachers during class. However, without reward from their parents, children will only finish the homework and then spend most of their spare time in playing with their friends or playing computer games.
In addition, never should ignore the positive effect of rewarding children on the development of kid's study skills and money management skills. After a period of study, children will gradually learn how to learn knowledge efficiently. Children, in order to win money reward from their parents, will gradually discover a efficient learning approach that fit them best. For example, some children may find out that they can effectively learn by taking notes during class and review it again after class, some may realize that they should better learn by watching course videos. They best way of study they found during this course will play a important role in the future when they enter college or after graduation. What's more, the money they get from their parents also help them improve the ability of managing their money. After eraning money by getting good grades, kids have to distribute the money approprately. They should, for instance, accumulate the money for the whole year in order to buy a favoriate toy, increasing their sense of saving money and use it wisely.
In conclusion, only by giving money reward for children's excellent academic performance can students study harder and nurture their study skills and money management skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to approach'
Suggestion: to approach
...gradually discover a efficient learning approach that fit them best. For example, some c...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...they found during this course will play a important role in the future when they ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...they enter college or after graduation. Whats more, the money they get from their par...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13138686131 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44095565592 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496350364964 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3676943789 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6315789474 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443676321815 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162092276861 0.076458572812 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163472081035 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.348455464738 0.150856017488 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.290050292929 0.0645574589148 449% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.