Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Strict rules that young people should obey, an important element of quality life, have been valued and even triggers a heated discussing over society today. The principles that young people should follow, in some people's views, is too strict nowadays. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that obeying these rules is beneficial, due to contributions to the person itself and the society.

What must be prioritized first is that following the rules is good for people themselves, instead of breaking them. To begin with, people could find the drawbacks of themselves when they want to do something that break the rules. To be specific, these drawbacks will grow into a bad consequence if people do not notice and fix them. Moreover, repairing this shortage is another way of cultivating their personalities. In detail, understanding what you are doing is the best way of knowing yourself and fostering your independence. However, if someone did something bad and even do not know what he did, it may be a criminal finally.

What equally worth discussing is that obeying the principles is beneficial for the society. Initially, as the time goes by, recent society has more requests for young people than before. Specifically, this is the evidence of social development. Additionally, the society will be peace and happiness if everyone obeys the rules. On the contrary, without following these requirement, the total community will soon become a hell because of the crime. To explain it deeper, no one is a saint and never makes a mistake, but after doing it, people should have the willing to fix the problems and avoid doing it again.

People themselves, improved by repairing the shortage, will cultivate their personalities. Society, developing recently, will stay in peace and happiness if everyone obey the rules. To conclude, only by following the strict social rules can people and society become better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... too strict nowadays. Contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that obeying ...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this requirement' or 'these requirements'?
Suggestion: this requirement; these requirements
...les. On the contrary, without following these requirement, the total community will soon become a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1821086262 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82420525248 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55910543131 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.606703416 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.1111111111 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276375097083 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833292357712 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683422510275 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174612064894 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520557881644 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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