Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The argument concludes that the Omega University should terminate the student evaluation of professor procedure so, that the graduates secure better jobs. To arrive to such a conclusion, the argument states the fact that the students from the Omega University are not able to secure jobs compare to the students from the near by Alpha University has. The argument rest on series of assumptions which are illogical and unpersuasive.
Firstly, the argument claims that the scores which the students have received are inflated and not the actual scores. The scores could have been increase due to many reasons like the teaching style got change and the students understand the topic in much deeper manner, it could aslo happen that due to the procedure of evaluting the professor done by the students, the professor has started teaching in a more good and efficent manner as his or her job are at risk. It could also happen that the university has been using the latest equipment in the labs and latest smart boards in teaching the students, so that they learn in much better way.
Secondly, the argument claims that the students from the Omega University are not securing jobs compare to the students from the Alpha University. There are many reasons why a student is not getting a job like the graduates from the Omega University are selcting to pursure a higher degree before the join the professional world. The students from the Omega university could also have started their own buisness or join the family buisness, so without knowing the number of opt out from the placement of the Omega university it would not be right to conclude that due to student evaluting procedure the students of Omega University are not securing the jobs.
Thirdly, the argument claim that the graduates from the Alpha Univeristy are getting the jobs. There are several reason why a student gets a job like the university might have tie up with industries, that the industries should only hire students from the Alpha University. Moreover, it could also happen that the students from Alpha Univeristy are not intrested in pursuing higher education and they might not have a family business to join or they are not interested in starting their own startup. Unless, we know how many students from each university actually sat for the placement seasson we cannot conlcude anything that due to a program Omega university students are not securing better jobs.
In conlcusion, the argument should provide facts like how many students from each university sat for the placement seassion and also provide that does the Alpha University have any type of contract with any industry. Unless, the argument does not provide the aforementioned facts it is difficult to conclude that the students from the Omega University are not securing the jobs due to student evaluting the professor effectiveness and terminating this would not be logical.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2396 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.471 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...e jobs compare to the students from the near by Alpha University has. The argument rest...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02685950413 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59885080575 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.369834710744 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.2670609635 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.2 119.503703932 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2666666667 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289198850542 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122846949363 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757249450904 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193556933302 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462143905469 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.3799401198 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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