1 The following appeared in an article written by Dr Karp an anthropologist quot Twenty years ago Dr Field a noted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire vill | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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1.The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist."Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire vill

Although Dr. Karp has tried to highlight an interesting fact that the interview-centered
methods result in much more valid conclusions when compered to observation-centered
methods, the facts presented lack evidence that proves his claim. Even though
the study which Dr. Karp has selected to compare against his interview-based approach
focuses on a similar hypothesis, numerous other factors such as the considered
sample of children and the time period where the studies were conducted,
are not evidently the same.

As per the reference, Dr. Field has conducted the study twenty years ago. Thus,
the culture of the island 20 years ago can be definitely different when compared
to the current culture. There is no evidence to decide that there
has not been any change in the culture of the island within the past 20 years of
time. If it is proven that the culture in Tertia is now changed and children actually live with their
biological parents but they were reared by villagers 20 years back, Dr. Karp's
comparison about interview and observation-centered studies become void.

Further, it is not mentioned what observations did Dr. Field made. Whether he observed
only the children or whether he observed the adults also. Whether it is the
behaviors he observed or whether he observed any legal documentations that proved
who actually reared children in the Tertian village. If any evidence stated the
presence of a documented proof that might have strengthened Dr. Field's conclusion
and weakened the claim made by Dr. Karp on interview-centered method.

Even though Dr. Karp mentions that interviews were conducted with children from
Tertia, there is no exact evidence presented on the number of children interviewed,
what questions were asked during the interview and whether the interviews were preplanned
and pre-informed to the children. If evidence was presented on the number of children
interviewed and if it depicted a plausible count when compared to the total
children population of the island it would strengthen the results of Karp's study.

If children were directly asked about their biological parents during the interview,
that will lead the children to talk more about their biological parents even if
they were reared by other adults in the village. Thus, without presenting
the questions Karp cannot build a concrete connection between children talking more
about their biological parents and children not being reared by the entire
village.

If the interviews were planned and pre-informed to the children, children might
have been prepared to talk about their biological parents. Thus, solid evidence
should be present regarding the exact interview procedure followed, to
conclude that interview-centered method will establish more accurate understanding.

To prove that interview-centered method establish more accurate conclusions for the
considered fact, much more evidence needs to be presented by Dr. Karp. More evidence
is required to prove that there is no change in the culture within the past years.
Also more evidence should be available to compare the design of the observation
and interview centered methods.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ous other factors such as the considered sample of children and the time period w...
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...period where the studies were conducted, are not evidently the same. As per t...
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...ed and children actually live with their biological parents but they were reared ...
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...ldren or whether he observed the adults also. Whether it is the behaviors he obser...
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...erved the adults also. Whether it is the behaviors he observed or whether he obse...
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... have strengthened Dr. Fields conclusion and weakened the claim made by Dr. Karp ...
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...rviews were conducted with children from Tertia, there is no exact evidence prese...
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...d on the number of children interviewed, what questions were asked during the int...
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...e exact interview procedure followed, to conclude that interview-centered method ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, regarding, so, then, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2738.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5537525355 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05943413988 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442190669371 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6542046937 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.105263158 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9473684211 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 40.0 5.15768463074 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230429324903 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838007728466 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502284585308 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0585791772209 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502666720959 0.0628817314937 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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