Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of
education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or
might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Qaulity of learning relies on numerous factors including the teachers' and students' input
in the teaching and learning process. Further, the education system of a country will also affect
the quality of learning to a considerable amount. The prompt states that the competition among students
to achieve higher grades is an imperative causal for the lack of quality in learning. In my opinion, I
mostly agree with this position and argue that the standards of learning are not met when a student
focuses completely on his grades rather than the knowledge he grasps from the learnings, due to two
reasons.
In some cases and instances students who thrive for higher grades, also undergo a thorough learning
process. For an instance consider a student who is targetting the top notch of the class and
who actually cannot have good grades unless he really understand the concepts. Such students will
spend more time to understand the concepts accurately and clear out any arcane concepts by reaching
out to teachers, books and other plethora of references. This improves the quality of learning of the
particular student. If there is no competion for him to achieve higher results, he might have not gone through
the concepts deeply.
However, in very competitive environments where students's future rely solely on the grades,
they will search for techniques that will make then through the exams. The main focus will be on
the grades but, not on the knowledge he gains by learning the subject. Take an instance where the
exam paper is of the same pattern and the student has access to past papers. In such a case, students
will identify the patterns and memorize the answers to gain higher grades. This will hinder the whole
learning system of a student and degrade the value of teachings. In the end students will graduate with
higher grades but, with as naive products of an improper educational system. There will be imperative
effects on the attitude development and behavioral improvements of students due to the same scenario
where the student will not be molded during the class through the experiences he undergo with a firm
knowledge background. Eventually, this will result in an anomoulous, errornous and non-productive
workforce for the country.
Moreover, competition among students has a direct impact on the teachers too. Automatically
a competition will be created among teachers to produce the highest grades.Thus, teachers
will focus on covering only the sections that a relevant for the exams. Attention will not
be given to build a better learning environment and deliver a standard learning experience.
For an instance take a teacher who has a target of producing the best results for the college.
Then she will put her immense effort to take the students to higher grades by completing
whatever knowledge areas required for the exam. She will not consider teaching the complete
ideas the she know won't appear in the exam. Subsequently the whole 'quality of learning' will
be a mere criteria in the college's advertisement banner. Further, having the main focus on
grades will make students eschew asking questions and digging deep into subject matters.
Students will learn in a high-level and nebulous manner that will not long-last in their
careers.
Given the above reasons, to maintain a good quality in learning, students should have freedom
to dive through the body of knowledge. Should have ample time to weigh all aspects of new
information he come across. At any level of education, students should not marginalize the
importance of qaulity of learning over the grades he should obtain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...nts input in the teaching and learning process. Further, the education system of a cou...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s of learning are not met when a student focuses completely on his grades rather ...
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Line 10, column 67, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: top-notch
...onsider a student who is targetting the top notch of the class and who actually cannot ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argetting the top notch of the class and who actually cannot have good grades unl...
^^^
Line 11, column 55, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
...annot have good grades unless he really understand the concepts. Such students will spen...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erstand the concepts. Such students will spend more time to understand the concep...
^^^
Line 18, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dentss future rely solely on the grades, they will search for techniques that wil...
^^^
Line 19, column 76, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...t will make then through the exams. The main focus will be on the grades but, not on the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ugh the exams. The main focus will be on the grades but, not on the knowledge he ...
^^^
Line 20, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the subject. Take an instance where the exam paper is of the same pattern and th...
^^^
Line 23, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... In the end students will graduate with higher grades but, with as naive product...
^^^
Line 26, column 82, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'undergoes'.
Suggestion: undergoes
...ng the class through the experiences he undergo with a firm knowledge background. Even...
^^^^^^^
Line 31, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... teachers to produce the highest grades.Thus, teachers will focus on covering only ...
^^^^
Line 35, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... students to higher grades by completing whatever knowledge areas required for th...
^^^
Line 37, column 7, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'she'?
Suggestion: the; she
...t consider teaching the complete ideas the she know wont appear in the exam. Subsequen...
^^^^^^^
Line 37, column 15, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...er teaching the complete ideas the she know wont appear in the exam. Subsequently t...
^^^^
Line 37, column 45, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Subsequently,
...s the she know wont appear in the exam. Subsequently the whole quality of learning will be ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 11, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criterion'?
Suggestion: criterion
...ole quality of learning will be a mere criteria in the colleges advertisement banner. F...
^^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...earning will be a mere criteria in the colleges advertisement banner. Further, having t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 78, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...vertisement banner. Further, having the main focus on grades will make students eschew a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...anner. Further, having the main focus on grades will make students eschew asking ...
^^^
Line 40, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... manner that will not long-last in their careers. Given the above reasons, to ...
^^^
Line 44, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e ample time to weigh all aspects of new information he come across. At any level...
^^^
Line 45, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion, students should not marginalize the importance of qaulity of learning over t...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, thus, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3105.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 593.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23608768971 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93473315629 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71592476655 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470489038786 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 924.3 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0716505644 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.068965517 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4482758621 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31034482759 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 39.0 4.97078651685 785% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140468362818 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494163310177 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309268071732 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428796450491 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316743963641 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.