According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise. However, Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced a system in which teachers closely monitored students; under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. In the first year the honor code was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey, a majority of Groveton students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. Thus, all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The speaker argues that after adopting an honor code in college by students, the cheating has reduced significantly over the years for Groveton College. To bolster his conclusion, the speaker suggest other universities and colleges to adopt honor code to attenuate cheating among students. Although the argument seems convincing at first sight, the porous premises and faulty reasons are reflected conspicuously on a meticulous analysis. The speaker needs to make the evidence more cogent for people or authority to assume this validity.
To Begin with, the argument has the possible flaw in comparing Groveton College to other colleges and universities. According to the assumption made by the speaker, other colleges and universities which do not have honor of code will yield similar result , regarding reduced student cheating, as Groveton college. It may be possible that Groveton college students are complying with honor code because they have strict parents who force students into being well behaved. It might not be the case for other colleges and universities. If students of other colleges do not obey the rules and regulation of honor code even if an honor code is adopted, then speaker's contention would be undermined.
Furthermore, the speaker provides the evidence about cheating reported by students is reduced from twenty per year to zero is not robust. Maybe, students are planning with each other and not informing the college authorities. Perhaps, cheating is prevalent in college, and even teachers are not able to notice it. Unless the speaker strengthen above scenario by convincing explanations, the argument does not hold water.
Moreover, how can speaker be sure that students are honest in the survey? Isn't it possible that students are hiding truth about them cheating in exams so that they won't be blamed? It is possible that students cheat and also wants to save their friends who always cheat without complying to honor code. To bolster conclusion ss should provide concrete evidence that students are honestly giving their survey report.
While the argument consists of gap between the assumptions and the conclusion, it should not necessarily mean the whole essay is faulty. In conclusion, the speaker jumps to conclusion with insufficient investigation of his evidences and faults the case on his own. If the speaker intends to consider above mentioned factors and justifies the unwarranted premises on which the argument bases on, the essay could become more reasonable and practical.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2085 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.212 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.187 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.333 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ball training, if coach tends to ignore the the negative aspect of a player in the game...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ball training, if coach tends to ignore the the negative aspect of a player in the game...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 274.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32846715328 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52860396593 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57299270073 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3083396781 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267548195192 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891667725286 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482770905641 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156951589018 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403365496268 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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