According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies that in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awarness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
The argument claims that Production Company needs to allocate greater budget for advertising. The increase in budget is to increase the viewers of movies by Super Screen Movie Production Company as this year's viewers are lower than any other year. Stated in this way the argument fails to provide key factors based on which it can be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies upon the assumption for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak and flawed.
First, the argument readily assumes that the decrease in no of viewers is because movie reviews are not reaching the reviewers. This statement is a stretch because one cannot assume that the movie review is not reaching viewers without proper evidence as the genre of the movies can also be a reason. Let us take an example of two tollywood movies Khsnama and Gabbarsingh. Although the movie Kshanam received good reviews it did not had more viewers. But Gabbarsingh on contrary having an average review was still viewed by many because the genre of this movie is comedy. So, even though the review of Kshanam was better than Gabbarsingh and was known to everyone Gabbarsingh had more viewers than Kshanam because people preferred watching comedy genre. Clearly the argument doesnot mention anything about genre of the movies and peoples likeness to watch it. The argument could have been much clearer if is explicitly stated that there is a decrease in viewers even for the movies with likable genre.
Second, the argument states that fewer number of people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the agument did not provide the numbert of movies released in each year and the number of viewers to it. The argument did not provide any statistics related to the number of viewers per movie and the no of ,movies released per year. There might be an increase in number of viewers per movies and decrease in number of mocies release this years when compared to other years. For example let the number of movies released in year 2017 be 10 and there are 2 lakh viewers for these 10 movies. In year 2018 let the number of movies relased be 2 and the number of viewers be 50,000. Though the numbero f viewers in 2018 have decreased the average number of viewers has increased in 2019. The argument do not state that there is an average decrease in the viewers, instead it states there is a total decrease in the number of viewers. The argument would have been strengthend if it explictly stated that both the average and total number of viewers is lowerl when compared to all other years.
For the above mentioned reasons the argument is weak and thus flawed. The argument could have been strengthened if the author stated that there is a decrease in average number of viewers per movie and there is decrease in movies even for likable genere. For assesing any situation, it is necessary to have full knowledge of the situation wheras in this case the author did not provide any information about the average number viewers. Moreover the author doesnot provide the genre of the movies released and the likelihood of people to watch it. Therefore the argument is weak and unconvincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Let us take an example of two tollywood movies Khsnama and Gabbarsingh.
Error: tollywood Suggestion: toll wood
Sentence: Clearly the argument doesnot mention anything about genre of the movies and peoples likeness to watch it.
Error: doesnot Suggestion: despot
Sentence: The argument could have been much clearer if is explicitly stated that there is a decrease in viewers even for the movies with likable genre.
Error: likable Suggestion: liable
Sentence: This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the agument did not provide the numbert of movies released in each year and the number of viewers to it.
Error: numbert Suggestion: number
Error: agument Suggestion: augment
Sentence: There might be an increase in number of viewers per movies and decrease in number of mocies release this years when compared to other years.
Error: mocies Suggestion: movies
Sentence: For example let the number of movies released in year 2017 be 10 and there are 2 lakh viewers for these 10 movies.
Error: lakh Suggestion: lash
Sentence: In year 2018 let the number of movies relased be 2 and the number of viewers be 50,000.
Error: relased Suggestion: related
Sentence: Though the numbero f viewers in 2018 have decreased the average number of viewers has increased in 2019.
Error: numbero Suggestion: number
Sentence: The argument would have been strengthend if it explictly stated that both the average and total number of viewers is lowerl when compared to all other years.
Error: explictly Suggestion: explicitly
Error: lowerl Suggestion: lower
Error: strengthend Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: The argument could have been strengthened if the author stated that there is a decrease in average number of viewers per movie and there is decrease in movies even for likable genere.
Error: genere Suggestion: genre
Error: likable Suggestion: liable
Sentence: For assesing any situation, it is necessary to have full knowledge of the situation wheras in this case the author did not provide any information about the average number viewers.
Error: wheras Suggestion: whereas
Error: assesing Suggestion: assessing
Sentence: Moreover the author doesnot provide the genre of the movies released and the likelihood of people to watch it.
Error: doesnot Suggestion: despot
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 558 350
No. of Characters: 2642 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.86 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.735 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.396 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.481 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...uper Screen Movie Production Company as this years viewers are lower than any other ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...nt readily assumes that the decrease in no of viewers is because movie reviews are...
^^
Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...llywood movies Khsnama and Gabbarsingh. Although the movie Kshanam received good review...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Gabbarsingh. Although the movie Kshanam received good reviews it did not had mor...
^^
Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...hanam received good reviews it did not had more viewers. But Gabbarsingh on contra...
^^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...the number of viewers per movie and the no of ,movies released per year. There mi...
^^
Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...umber of viewers per movie and the no of ,movies released per year. There might b...
^^
Line 5, column 504, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nd decrease in number of mocies release this years when compared to other years. For...
^^^^
Line 5, column 748, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... 2 and the number of viewers be 50,000. Though the numbero f viewers in 2018 have decr...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 436, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ation about the average number viewers. Moreover the author doesnot provide the genre of...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 547, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...d the likelihood of people to watch it. Therefore the argument is weak and unconvincing. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2689.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 558.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81899641577 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43970269766 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.36917562724 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.0 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1373018368 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5925925926 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254410699691 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899550176748 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971233277413 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165637715934 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374417720498 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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