"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The recomendation of allocating a greater share of Super Screen budget next year to reaching the public through advertising raises some question about the previous efforts to reaching to prospective viewer. Peaple respons towards a quality time spending movie enomerously. So the advertising alone how can increase the demand is questionable.
The argument refers to the downard success of marketing Super Screen movie but upward success of rivewers review. Though it does not provide the number of movies produced during these compearing years. If the number of movies are less than past years then it is natural that number of viewers certainly fall this year. On the other hand reviewers review does not varied by the number of movie but the quality of movie. And so it will resolve the matter of advertaisment lackings.
Also there is no data of steps taken to advertising during past years. If the difference is not significant then it will clearly lead the way to think about other faults. If the produced movie were too high thought for general people then it will clearly decrease the viewer numbers. On the other hand reviewers do appriciate this kind of movie. So it certainly increase the review levels.
So if above questions are answered positively then it will be in vain to allocate greater budget in advertising Super Screen movie. And if not only then can this step may lead to success of increasing the number of prospective viewers.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The recomendation of allocating a greater share of Super Screen budget next year to reaching the public through advertising raises some question about the previous efforts to reaching to prospective viewer.
Error: recomendation Suggestion: recommendation
Sentence: Peaple respons towards a quality time spending movie enomerously.
Error: enomerously Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: respons Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The argument refers to the downard success of marketing Super Screen movie but upward success of rivewers review.
Error: rivewers Suggestion: rivers
Error: downard Suggestion: downward
Sentence: Though it does not provide the number of movies produced during these compearing years.
Error: compearing Suggestion: comparing
Sentence: And so it will resolve the matter of advertaisment lackings.
Error: lackings Suggestion: lacking
Error: advertaisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: On the other hand reviewers do appriciate this kind of movie.
Error: appriciate Suggestion: appreciate
flaws:
No. of Words: 243 350 //at least 3 arguments wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 243 350
No. of Characters: 1191 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.948 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.901 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.112 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... but upward success of rivewers review. Though it does not provide the number of movie...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...produced during these compearing years. If the number of movies are less than past...
^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'vary'
Suggestion: vary
...he other hand reviewers review does not varied by the number of movie but the quality ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...he matter of advertaisment lackings. Also there is no data of steps taken to adve...
^^^^
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...taken to advertising during past years. If the difference is not significant then ...
^^
Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
...ate this kind of movie. So it certainly increase the review levels. So if above quest...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ertainly increase the review levels. So if above questions are answered positively...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 2260.96107784 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 243.0 441.139720559 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01234567901 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63926248168 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534979423868 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 705.55239521 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3940967685 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311053813167 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969463414233 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732239070433 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178216294967 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101315320044 0.0628817314937 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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