Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Although parents give birth to their children and raise them, when they get young they do not want to live in the same house with their parents. Young adults believe it hampers freedom and they cannot live their live by their terms staying with their parents. There are other kind of young adults who prefer to live with their parents for a long time. I prefer the second situation young adults staying with their parents.

Firstly, I support young adults to live with their family because it is a crusial age. Youngsters often make wrong decisions or do something wrong by getting emotional. If they live alone there will be no one to correct them. They will become more frustrated and might get into more trouble. But if they stay with their parents, their parents would know that their child is doing. They can instruct them or show them the right path If the young adult makes any mistake his or her parents should be their to correct or help them. It is important to live with your parents to grow family values and able to handle situations.

Secondly, an young adult should stay with their parents for his or her studies. IF a young adult lives alone he or she has to work to support his accomodation, food, clothes, tution fees and so on. This may hamper his study. He or she might loose his interest in study as well for doing other works. But, if young adults live with their parents they do not need to think about all these stuff and focus on study properly. They may do any part-time job only for their pocket money but they can concrete in their study properly.

Thirdly, young stars should live with their parents for the sake of them. When children grow up, parents grow old. They need their children's support and love very much at this point. If their children live them alone they will feel lonly. Sometimes it is risky if there is any health issue. It is the main responsibility of an young adult to support their parents when they need them. So living with parents can make this situation more real.

There is a gerneration gap between parents and youngsters. Youngsters think parents do not understand them and they want to get rid of them. But every young adult can enjoy their own life and stay with their parents by handeling situations maturely.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as to, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59558823529 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12864648573 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446078431373 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.965473037 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.4444444444 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1111111111 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25925925926 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454910428997 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163230594681 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127542829192 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323074571757 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845211997889 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.08 8.01818996416 76% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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