The author of the argument concludes that if greater share of budget is allocated to advertising of movies then there will be a surge or no decrease in the viewers who watch Super Screen produced movies. The argument is fraught with many logical fallacies which needed to be coorected to make argument sound.
Firstly, author assumes that a large share of budget needed to be allocated to advertisin, however, there is a chance that the budget allocated to the movies might be reduced. Consequently, despite the surge in advertising, there will be decrease in viewers as there has been a deterioration of quality in movies. To strengthen the argument the author need to state that the large share allocation of budget to advertising will not have a significant negative impact on quality of movies.
Secondly, the author states that as there is a percentage increase in positive reviews, the quality of the movies is fine. Nontheless, it depends on what the initial number of positive reviews two years ago were. Morover, if there are very few reviews, say 10, two years ago and even though there have been 50% increase past year there will be increase of 5 which does not translate essentially that the quality is good. In order to strengthen the argument, the author need to mention that the increase in the positive reviews is susbtantial enough to claim that quality of movies is not an issue.
Finally, the advertising director assumes that lack of awareness is only reason for fall in movie viewers. However, the author overlooks that there can be some other cause that is responsible for the fall in viewers. There might be a possibility that there is a recent economic depression due to which people made cuts in their spending for entertainment. Generally during an econmic depression, people strive hard to meet their routine neccessary needs such as food, clothing, health etc. and cut their spendings to others such as entertainment, luxury etc. To strengthen the argument, the author needed to mention explicitly that there was no other cause which impacted the fall in viewers.
On a sum, the argument made some assumptions for which he had not provided any justification. The argument would be strengthened if author justifies that the increase in buget to advertising will have a significant increase in number of viewers , lack of awareness is only cause for fall in number of viewers and the percent increase in the number of positive reviews is a substantial value.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument is fraught with many logical fallacies which needed to be coorected to make argument sound.
Error: coorected Suggestion: corrected
Sentence: Firstly, author assumes that a large share of budget needed to be allocated to advertisin, however, there is a chance that the budget allocated to the movies might be reduced.
Error: advertisin Suggestion: advertising
Sentence: In order to strengthen the argument, the author need to mention that the increase in the positive reviews is susbtantial enough to claim that quality of movies is not an issue.
Error: susbtantial Suggestion: substantial
Sentence: Generally during an econmic depression, people strive hard to meet their routine neccessary needs such as food, clothing, health etc. and cut their spendings to others such as entertainment, luxury etc. To strengthen the argument, the author needed to mention explicitly that there was no other cause which impacted the fall in viewers.
Error: econmic Suggestion: economic
Error: neccessary Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: The argument would be strengthened if author justifies that the increase in buget to advertising will have a significant increase in number of viewers , lack of awareness is only cause for fall in number of viewers and the percent increase in the number of positive reviews is a substantial value.
Error: buget Suggestion: budget
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2026 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.702 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.64 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 47, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y, the advertising director assumes that lack of awareness is only reason for fal...
^^
Line 9, column 245, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ignificant increase in number of viewers , lack of awareness is only cause for fal...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98561151079 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7915011057 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.42206235012 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3052375331 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.294117647 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151069435551 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543265117367 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482189699442 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845884517373 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557066732403 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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