In this memo, the author argues that lavender is curative of insomnia within a short period of time. To support this argument, the author points out that sleep enhancement was witnessed after using the lavender-scented pillows in only 2 weeks in a recent research. However, the argument is found to be specious in several respects.
To begin with, the author conducted experiment 3 weeks but this is sufficient enough to make a conclusion. Even though insomnia was less likely to occur by stopping original medication, it is required to check the persistence of its effect. As the following two weeks after stopping usual one showed opposite symptoms both negative and positive, it is not warranted to bolster the effect will be consistent afterwards. The research should be continued at least more than 3 weeks to better assess it.
Even if the patients experienced enhancement in their sleep, we would need to know whether the sleeping environment was similar with each participants’ original sleeping environments. Perhaps the research conducted place was more comfortable and relaxing because of sleeping on top ranked mattress and quitter surroundings. Unless providing sufficient evidences that participants’ original sleeping environment and the tested location were similar, it is difficult to bolster the author’s argument.
Even if the author can substantiate the two forgoing assumptions, the argument relies on the assumption that the research will show identical results even conducted in a disturbing condition. If the research wanted to obtain their wanted results, they may deceive the real results by conducting the research in the best condition. What if the research added some impediments during sleep time, such as clanging sound or creating a stressful situation before subjects’ sleep time, then will the results will still turn out to be better than not sleeping with lavender scented pillows? Indeed, their sleep will be interrupted regardless of the usage of such pillows, however, if the research also found sleep enhancement even though in this interrupted condition when using lavender scent, then it would more reinforce the author’s argument.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, the research should be conducted in a long-term period for reinforcing accuracy. To better assess the argument we would need to know about whether the participants had the same sleeping conditions before and after the experiment and comparing it in some interrupted conditions should be added to the research also.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 2113 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.269 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.862 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.095 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... is curative of insomnia within a short period of time. To support this argument, the author p...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent research'.
Suggestion: recent research
...nder-scented pillows in only 2 weeks in a recent research. However, the argument is found to be s...
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Line 9, column 376, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ditions should be added to the research also.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, at least, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47132169576 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08971417239 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496259351621 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1109622071 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.058823529 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0966454829124 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356979598578 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419219727896 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.063362060981 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486834019988 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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