Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The theory states that its due to the change in the ice cover pattern their is a change in migration pattern of the deer and this is the primary reason for the decline in tits population. Such a theory looks far flung as migration patterns can change not necessarily resulting in the decline of population. As animals adapt to their new condition, especially if its gradual change like global warming (in the present state).
The article states that there is a decline in the deer population and states that the source to the information are the local hunters. There are problems regarding the source cited here. The hunters generally don't visit the arctic regions to verify if the deer population has actually decreased. They probably stay in the wait in the islands for the deer to arrive. If the argument has to sustain then more credible source is required. Rather than just theorising about the decline in population the better idea can be to visit the Arctic region to verify the given information.
If there is a decline in deer population then also its important to understand if the decline is due to global warming or due to hunting. There is a possibility that due to hunting the population of the deer grew thin. The local hunters will obviously won't be great source of information to highlight the problems related to hunting of deer. As that would adversely affect their reputation and further bring in jurisdiction on hunting.The deer behaviour and choice of habitat may have changed due to human activities like hunting or population increase in these regions.
Another possible reason why it is difficult to believe in the theory that melting of ice led to a decline of deer population because it is possible that the writers are tracking only the traditional path followed by the deer. Then the deer are taking different path due to the change in ice cover pattern, it is highly erroneous to consider that all of the ice cover has melted. Global warming is still an on going process. So this different ice cover pattern can led them to different islands. Moreover, it is important to look in the vegetation cover of the islands where the deer traditionally resorted to. There is a possibility that due to deforestation the plants they use to feed on is sparse and they found a better alternative.To mitigate all of these critical questions its important to trace the deer that still arrive on these islands trace their path. migration pattern can be traced down if we can take where these herd start from. Moreover the changes in the population density and vegtation cover are to be looked into, to understand the validity of the proposition. Until we look into other possibilities and render them insignificant theorising on the decline just based on global warming seems premature.
The theory has to invalidate several other claims in order to justify its standing.In the meantime its remains a proposition based on several logical inconsistencies.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2433 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.78 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.667 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.62 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... to the change in the ice cover pattern their is a change in migration pattern of the...
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...ource cited here. The hunters generally dont visit the arctic regions to verify if t...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in the islands for the deer to arrive. If the argument has to sustain then more c...
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Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...light the problems related to hunting of deer. As that would adversely affect the...
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Suggestion: The
...urther bring in jurisdiction on hunting.The deer behaviour and choice of habitat ma...
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...it is highly erroneous to consider that all of the ice cover has melted. Global warming is...
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... has melted. Global warming is still an on going process. So this different ice cover pa...
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...at due to deforestation the plants they use to feed on is sparse and they found a b...
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...rse and they found a better alternative.To mitigate all of these critical question...
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Suggestion: Migration
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...claims in order to justify its standing.In the meantime its remains a proposition ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 504.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75769383425 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426587301587 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2133514441 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.739130435 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21739130435 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160893869586 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491880998768 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548732334693 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782805471837 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518072149596 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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