Argument Topic: The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
The Author feels that the development of the road should be prohibited in order preserve tufted groundhog population. The evidence presented to support the claim is that there was decline in sea otter population when sanctuary status was repeal in Eastern Carpenteria and therefore the development of road will cause tufted groundhog population to decline. The assumption is flawed in many aspects and be can evaluated properly once the following questions are answered.
Firstly, Does sea otter and tufted groundhog prefer similiar environmental condition? The author prematurely assumes that since sea otter population declined tufted groundhog population will also decline without providing evidence to bolster the assumption. It might be possible that sea otter prefer differ climatic condition. For instance, sea otter might prefer cold weather but in Eastern Carpenteria temperature might be gradually rising or there might be rise in the population of predators of sea otter. Decline in population of sea otter might be based on several other factors and proper research is needed to find what exactly cost the decline.
Secondly, Factors that might affect tufted groundhog population? The author talks very little about how the development of road would link to the decline in the population. The author just assumes that the development will result in declining the population. For instance, If the goverment plans to deposit waste in coastland while developing the road then they could ask goverment to deposit waste somewhere else. A proper communication has to be established in order to find out how exactly how would the development of the road harm the tufted groundhog.
Thirdly, Did any construction take place in neighboring eastern carpenteria after repeal of sanctuary status? The author only mentions that the sanctuary status was repeal but does not indiacate on the kind of development that took place in in Eastern Carpenteria. For instance, In Eastern Carpenteria lots of factory might have been build after 1978 which might have lead to decrease in sea utter population but building just a single road might be innocous to tufted groundhog.
In conclusion, the arguement is based on several unwarranted assumptions and can the properly assessed once the above mention questions are answered properly
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.333 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.773 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.16 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tufted groundhog population to decline. The assumption is flawed in many aspects an...
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Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'evaluate' or 'be evaluated'?
Suggestion: evaluate; be evaluated
...on is flawed in many aspects and be can evaluated properly once the following questions a...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...the kind of development that took place in in Eastern Carpenteria. For instance, In E...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44077134986 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84923073715 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460055096419 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5098241525 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.176470588 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114083229368 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482035666697 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479250061792 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689159438819 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339952224094 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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