In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the statement claims that by improving the highways of the Prunty County, they will lower the accident rates of the Prunty County. The statement concludes to apply a similar approach to decrease the accident rates, as the Butler county. However, the statement is faulty as it stands for the following reasons.
Firstly, the author discusses the failure of the last strategy to decrase the accident rates in Prunty county. According to the statement, the residents of the Prunty County did not follow the speed limit rules and there was not a decrease in the accident rates. The statement claims that many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. But, the statement fails to provide any quantitative data. There might be a chance that most of the drivers exceeds the speed limit. The steatment also fails to provide quantitative data of the accident rate of Prunty County.
Secondly, the author concludes that by applying similar startegy in Prunty County as Butler County, accident rate will decrease. However, there might be a chance that this same startegy will not decrease the accident rates of Prunty County. Some road imporvements decreased the accident rates of Butler County may not decrease the accident rates of Prunty County because the circumstances of both the counties will be different.
According to the statement, the drivers of Prunty exceeded the speed limit even on rough and narrow highways. Now, if Prunty County provide wide and smooth highways, the cases of overspeeding may rise and this may lead to increment of accident rates. Hence, this startegy may not work. Lastly, the expansion and resurfacing of highway takes lots of money, time and energy. There might be a chance that the couty has not enough money to bear the costs. Moreover, during the time of the road expansions, the accident rate may get even highter than the current rate because of the diversions.
Therefore, the author fails to bolster the statement by providing enough proofs. The author must include the quantitiative data of the population and accident rates of both of the counties to strenghten tha statement. Hence, I found the statement is faulty as it stands.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2171 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.945 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.292 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.49 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 423, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s of both the counties will be different According to the statement the drivers o...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rrent rate because of the diversions Therefore the author fails to bolster the stateme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58199827574 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398633257403 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 439.0 22.8473053892 1921% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2195.0 119.503703932 1837% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 439.0 23.324526521 1882% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 120.0 5.70786347227 2102% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263706780711 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.263706780711 0.0743258471296 355% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127944871821 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932254763619 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 221.6 14.3799401198 1541% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -374.11 48.3550499002 -774% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 174.5 12.197005988 1431% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.2 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 28.29 8.32208582834 340% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 12.3882235529 476% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 177.6 11.1389221557 1594% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 222.0 11.9071856287 1864% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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