"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals
It might seem logical, at first glance to agree with the argument about the mopeds accident during summer and remedies to overcome it. However, To fully evaluate this argument, we need a significant amount of additional evidence, the argument could end up much weaker than it seems, or it might be quite valid. To make that determination, we need to know more than analyze what we learn.
The first piece of evidence provided by author of Seaville town seems superficial as without apropos justification to evidence regarding the survey, directly implementing same rule leads to improper result which certainly engender to detrimental effects, writer in these cases directly linking the conditions of Seaville town with the Balmer without providing warranted evidence, just by predicting the same result in Balmer without understanding the crowd nature, infrastructure and other factors like training programs and facilities available. There might be a case that seaville has improved its infrastructure or it has made there traffic rules stringent that might eventually lead to alleviate the amount of accidents.
Secondly author making an assertion that reduction in number of mopeds reduces the number of accident but unable to justify it relevance with the topic, and just by reducing the number of rental mopeds if accident will significantly reduce than what other option of transportation will government provide to tourist as without providing the other option the pedestrian crowd ill increase and eventually clog the road secondly if government fail to provide other option due to will facilities and discomfort tourist will avoid Balmer and government may face serious economic loss.
Thirdly, author so not mention the apropos justifiable evidence that the accidents are mainly due to mopeds and not any other factors are contributing to accidents there might be other conducive factors of accidents like crowd nature or road might be narrower as compared to the roads in Balmer or there might be other vehicles which are responsible for the accident or may be due to the environmental condition like smog and fog during morning time and excess heat during afternoon leads to mirage-like condition which might lead to misjudging road and can lead to mishap.
In conclusion, the argument turns much weak owing to the evidence used, assumption concerned and weak reasoning. It can be significantly stronger if the author’s provides more information regarding which might help to bridge the logical gaps. So to deserves the scenario of the argument we need more information on the contributing factors without it the argument is unconvincing and receptive discussion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2226 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.262 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.838 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.874 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mopeds'' or 'moped's'?
Suggestion: mopeds'; moped's
...ce to agree with the argument about the mopeds accident during summer and remedies to ...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cation to evidence regarding the survey, directly implementing same rule leads to...
^^
Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idence that the accidents are mainly due to mopeds and not any other factors are ...
^^
Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... crowd nature or road might be narrower as compared to the roads in Balmer or ther...
^^
Line 9, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... unconvincing and receptive discussion.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38151658768 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91567432295 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488151658768 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 198.359774148 57.8364921388 343% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 227.1 119.503703932 190% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.2 23.324526521 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.70786347227 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122303116844 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395580983532 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518295978675 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.064952982563 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443823015246 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.0 14.3799401198 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.39 48.3550499002 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.32208582834 118% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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