"Since its opening in Collegeville twenty years ago, Monarch Books has developed a large customer base due to its reader-friendly atmosphere and wide selection of books on all subjects. Last month, Book and Bean, a combination bookstore and coffee shop, announced its intention to open a Collegeville store. Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in the space currently devoted to children's books. Given recent national census data indicating a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten, sales of children's books are likely to decline. By replacing its children's books section with a café, Monarch Books can increase profits and ward off competition from Book and Bean."
The argument states that, Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in the space currently devoted to children's books so that it can increase profits and can compete with Book and Bean,a combination bookstore and coffee shop, who announced its intention to open a Collegeville store, the same place where monarch book is located. However, the given reasoning of an arguement is not entirley logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumtions.
Primerily, The author completley ignores the fact that monarch book is twenty years old and is well established. Whereas, the book and bean a new bookstore and coffee shop is not yet started as well as we dont know weather combining the bookstore with coffee shop can be a better option or not, author has not given any evidance that combining the bookstore with a coffee shop can increase the sell. Also it is true that book and bean just announced its intention to open a shop and from this we can not say anything about its success particularly in the area where the very old and populer bookstore is alrady there'
Secondly, The author is making an huge assumption based upon the national data that percentage of the population under age ten is significant decline. Again It is a national data and may or may not be true for the place like Collegeville. It may possible that the Collegeville has more no. of children than the any other part of the nation or It may also possible that the children in Collegeville are reading much more than other children does. so Author has be very specific regarding the survey and data which is being used for making any conclusion.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound. The evidances given in support of the conclusion that children's books section should be replace with cafe does
little to improve that conclusion, Since it does not address the assumtion alrady stated. Ultimately the arguement might have been strenghthen if the author could have shown that combining the bookstore with cafe increses the profit as well as popularity, that the no. of children in Collegeville is also decresing significantlyand people of Collegeville also want such type of change in the bookstore.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1798 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.675 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.673 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...ofits and can compete with Book and Bean,a combination bookstore and coffee shop, ...
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Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e shop is not yet started as well as we dont know weather combining the bookstore wi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...th a coffee shop can increase the sell. Also it is true that book and bean just anno...
^^^^
Line 9, column 32, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ere Secondly, The author is making an huge assumption based upon the national...
^^
Line 9, column 447, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ing much more than other children does. so Author has be very specific regarding t...
^^
Line 9, column 461, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...than other children does. so Author has be very specific regarding the survey and ...
^^
Line 13, column 133, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'replaced'?
Suggestion: replaced
... that childrens books section should be replace with cafe does little to improve that...
^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Little
...tion should be replace with cafe does little to improve that conclusion, Since it do...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, whereas, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97035040431 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72219582574 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479784366577 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.407159272 57.8364921388 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.846153846 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262132939876 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788085426103 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933933001982 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141829767143 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116131451322 0.0628817314937 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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