Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
As the author claim that innovation has its importance but seldom it distract the students from the real learning the claim asserted by the author seems very vague as distraction is cannot be determine by the technology rather it depends upon the particular individual and the teachers capabilities to generate an interest regarding subject.
As the student I always prefer technology over boredom lecture as audio-video animated lectures can help with better understanding regarding the subject and retention ability of audio visual videos are more as compare to lectures
The innovative concept like model making and field visit can help students with the ground reality of the subject and hence interest as well as the practical applicability of the subject flourishes. Technology always serve as a tool which has both good as well as bad side its solely depend upon the individual how to use it rather for productive use or for detrimental use.
Regarding the real learning as author assert , real learning is nothing extraordinary but understanding the concept that is gaining of a knowledge and application of it .if technology serves as a boon to the students or bane its solely depend upon the individual and his /her desire to gain knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'distracts'?
Suggestion: distracts
...vation has its importance but seldom it distract the students from the real learning the...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
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...ability of audio visual videos are more as compare to lectures The innovative co...
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
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Suggestion: it's; it is
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Suggestion:
... and his /her desire to gain knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, regarding, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 58.6224719101 39% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 2235.4752809 47% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 204.0 442.535393258 46% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.55969084622 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91442085147 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 215.323595506 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 704.065955056 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.7261549396 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 264.0 118.986275619 222% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.0 23.4991977007 217% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.75 5.21951772744 225% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124765071497 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075288504915 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332665925671 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759873526138 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328105651944 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.5 14.1392134831 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 48.8420337079 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 12.1743820225 200% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.38706741573 121% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 11.8971910112 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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