Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically. Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The given argument prompt is saying that the people of Benton City is following the government nutritional recommendation more closely than they did ten years ago. That is why their food habit has gone through some positive changes. Depending on the changes of food habit, the author of the given argument prompt has predicted that the obesity rate in the city will be decreased soon. At first sight, the argument looked quite cogent. But a close scrutiny of the argument prompt reveals a number of loopholes. There are some unanswered questions that must be answered to make the argument cogent and logical.
Firstly, the author mentioned about government nutritional recommendation. But, here the author have not given any particular information about the recommendations. So, we cannot conclude that the government recommendations are the reason of the change of food habit of the people of the city without explicitly mentioning the recommendations. So, the question "What are the government nutritional recommendation?" must be answered to make the argument meaningful.
Secondly, the author has mentioned two food items named "kiran" and "sulia". Here, he has said that the peple of Benton City is buying kiran more than before as it reduces cholesterol. Again, he has said that the people of the city is avoiding sulia because it is not good for health.But, I think the author has generalized the case unwarrantedly. Maybe people are simply using kiran in their food products because it increases the taste of the food product while they are also eating other food items that are full of cholesterol. Maybe they are avoiding sulia because other food products other than sulia found in the city taste better than sulia. So, the author must answer the question "are the people of the Benton City using only food products that are free of cholesterol and avoiding food product that are harmful for health?" to make the argument a valid one.
Thirdly, the author has mentioned that government nutritional recommendations are the only reason of changing the food habit of the people of the city. But, it may not be the case. Here, in the argument, the difference of the weather of the city is never mentioned. Maybe the weather of the city ten years ago was different from the weather of the city now. Weather can be a big factor in changing the food habit of the people. Moreover, the taste of the people of a country never remains the same. It changes with time. May be the taste of the people of Benton city has been changed with the passage of time because the period of ten years is long enough to bring change in the food habit of the people of a particular place. So, the author must mention all the reason to validate the argument.
To conclude, the information mentioned is the passage is not sufficient to make the argument cogent and valid. Some factors like the reasons of the changes of food habit, the detail information about government nutritional recommendation, list of harmless and harmful food items and the rate of their usage in that particular area, the weather comparison of the city etc must be given importance to make the argument logical.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 538 350
No. of Characters: 2569 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.816 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.643 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.926 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.085 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: scrutiny
...the argument looked quite cogent. But a close scrutiny of the argument prompt reveals a number...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to make the argument meaningful. Secondly, the author has mentioned two f...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...sulia because it is not good for health.But, I think the author has generalized the...
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Line 10, column 37, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ns the same. It changes with time. May be the taste of the people of Benton city ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 537.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00931098696 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92184408523 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376163873371 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 849.6 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.3310837791 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6296296296 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85185185185 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194366656826 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640144261871 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082401350135 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119618811819 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04463919836 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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