The city council of Town X has proposed reducing the city's electric expenses by switching all the lights in public building from incandescent bulbs to light-emitting diodes (LEDs). The switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn out, and the city council reasons that since LED lights burn brighter and cost no more to purchase, the switch would help Town X save money on electrical costs in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to help evaluate the efficacy of the city council's proposal to save money on electrical costs. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the council's prediction.
Firstly, it is mentioned that only public buildings would would undergo this change of lighting.
Why not other public places as well? Public roads, gardens and many other places need
to be included. Moreover public buildings may consume less power as they do not have all
lights working throughout the night, albeit street lighting is mandatory. This neglect
is not suppoerted or justified anywhere in the passage given, thereforre it may not necessarily
reduce a siginificant amount of energy costs for the city. Had all the public places been included
for this change, the proposition would have seemed promising.
Secondly, it is indicated that the incandescant bulbs will be replaced once they stoop
working or fuse out. This points to the question of the life of these LED bulbs. Are
they going to last as long as the old bulbs? It could be possible that the these bulbs need replacement
more than the incandescant bulbs needed- thus losing credibility of reducing the overall
costs. Perhaps the cost of continuing with the old bulbs might commensurate
with the cost of replacing these ephimereal LED bulbs.The propostition hold true if the l
life of an LED bulb is the no more that of an incandescent bulb.
Lastly, LED bulbs may burn brighter than the old bulbs- that does not implicate they consume
lesser power. There is no information provided on the wattage of an incandescent bulb and LED bulb,
which simply loses the credibility in the idea that this replacement is going to bode favourable
towards the electrical costs in the future. A 40 watt incandescent bulb for example provides 60 lux of
luminocity wheras a 60 watt LED bulb provides 80 lux. The math does not go well in this assumption and
therefore we need to know more about the wattage of both the old and new bulbs.
Night time is the only time lighting is necessary, therefore all public places should be included inthis plan.
This idea seems plausible only when adequate information is provided on the wattage and life span of each bulb.
Overlooking these technical aspects is a gross mistake Town X is making.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This neglect is not suppoerted or justified anywhere in the passage given, thereforre it may not necessarily reduce a siginificant amount of energy costs for the city.
Error: thereforre Suggestion: therefore
Error: siginificant Suggestion: significant
Error: suppoerted Suggestion: supported
Sentence: Secondly, it is indicated that the incandescant bulbs will be replaced once they stoop working or fuse out.
Error: incandescant Suggestion: incandescent
Sentence: It could be possible that the these bulbs need replacement more than the incandescant bulbs needed- thus losing credibility of reducing the overall costs.
Error: incandescant Suggestion: incandescent
Sentence: Perhaps the cost of continuing with the old bulbs might commensurate with the cost of replacing these ephimereal LED bulbs.The propostition hold true if the l life of an LED bulb is the no more that of an incandescent bulb.
Error: ephimereal Suggestion: ephemeral
Error: propostition Suggestion: proposition
Sentence: A 40 watt incandescent bulb for example provides 60 lux of luminocity wheras a 60 watt LED bulb provides 80 lux.
Error: luminocity Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: wheras Suggestion: whereas
Sentence: Night time is the only time lighting is necessary, therefore all public places should be included inthis plan.
Error: inthis Suggestion: ?
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1698 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.603 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.783 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: would
...is mentioned that only public buildings would would undergo this change of lighting. Why n...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oads, gardens and many other places need to be included. Moreover public building...
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Line 4, column 17, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...any other places need to be included. Moreover public buildings may consume less power...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reet lighting is mandatory. This neglect is not suppoerted or justified anywhere ...
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Line 6, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...given, thereforre it may not necessarily reduce a siginificant amount of energy c...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Had all the public places been included for this change, the proposition would h...
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Line 12, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le that the these bulbs need replacement more than the incandescant bulbs needed-...
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Line 14, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng with the old bulbs might commensurate with the cost of replacing these ephimer...
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Line 15, column 55, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...of replacing these ephimereal LED bulbs.The propostition hold true if the l life o...
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Line 18, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bs- that does not implicate they consume lesser power. There is no information pr...
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Line 20, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... replacement is going to bode favourable towards the electrical costs in the futu...
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Line 21, column 97, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'lux' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'luces', 'luxes'.
Suggestion: luces; luxes
...candescent bulb for example provides 60 lux of luminocity wheras a 60 watt LED bu...
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Line 21, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cent bulb for example provides 60 lux of luminocity wheras a 60 watt LED bulb pro...
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Line 22, column 50, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'lux' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'luces', 'luxes'.
Suggestion: luces; luxes
...y wheras a 60 watt LED bulb provides 80 lux. The math does not go well in this assu...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, therefore, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01123595506 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65550334549 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525280898876 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.725968723 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255378395185 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769476957159 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032974643282 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704705811227 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307746538381 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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