The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The Oceania University has decided to retain its faculty by providing their children complete tuituion waiver. It is a tricky aspect when faculty are rewarded with such a perk. This keeps the quality of education hamstrung in many ways, which have been overlooked.
Firstly, when such schemes are widely put to use, the common student body not having their parent on the faculty board would feel deprived. That would definitely be a large number of students who do not get equal rights as children who enjoy the perquisite of their faculty-parents. This would discredit the credibility of scholarships and sports merit. Thus to retain the faculty as well as the belief in the student scholarships, the school should provide a subsidized fee for faculty for their children.
Secondly, decision of free tuition disrupts the schooling ethics in general. If a student gets full waiver through scholarships they tend to get a sense of satisfaction and pride in what they have achieved, bolstering their confidence to prove even more in academics. When a child of a faculty gets free tuition, the child may get care-free belittle the education they are recieving. I had a friend in school who was a son of the chariman of board od associates. His parents owned the school, which gave him the freedom to do anything he wanted with impunity. He had the worst grades in class and yet was promoted to higher grades. Later in life this friend is struggling to pass examinations and surpassing interview tests where their parents influence does not reach.
Thirdly, new professors would defnitely come join the University and old faculty would no doubted have a boosted morale, but sincerely will they be indebted to the University or the teaching profession ?
It is possible that the new professors join who have their childrent getting admitted in this university, and vacate their jobs as soon as their children complete their study free of cost. Moreover the old faculty may lose thier enthusiasm as they no longer are pressured to perform well in academia when they feel prestiged by giving such a concession for having their children in same University. THe entire point of faculty retention fails at this conjecture.
University is a place for qaulity education and faculty retention should not be at the expense of depriving the quality itself.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: When a child of a faculty gets free tuition, the child may get care-free belittle the education they are recieving.
Error: care-free Suggestion: carefree
Error: recieving Suggestion: receiving
Sentence: I had a friend in school who was a son of the chariman of board od associates.
Error: od Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: chariman Suggestion: chairman
Sentence: Thirdly, new professors would defnitely come join the University and old faculty would no doubted have a boosted morale, but sincerely will they be indebted to the University or the teaching profession ?
Error: defnitely Suggestion: definitely
Sentence: It is possible that the new professors join who have their childrent getting admitted in this university, and vacate their jobs as soon as their children complete their study free of cost.
Error: childrent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Moreover the old faculty may lose thier enthusiasm as they no longer are pressured to perform well in academia when they feel prestiged by giving such a concession for having their children in same University.
Error: prestiged Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: University is a place for qaulity education and faculty retention should not be at the expense of depriving the quality itself.
Error: qaulity Suggestion: quality
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. well, better not to use another example to prove something wrong in the topic. maybe this example has logical flaws too.
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1917 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.809 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...feel deprived. That would definitely be a large number of students who do not get equal rights as...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ility of scholarships and sports merit. Thus to retain the faculty as well as the be...
^^^^
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: NOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...in the University and old faculty would no doubted have a boosted morale, but sinc...
^^
Line 8, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...dren complete their study free of cost. Moreover the old faculty may lose thier enthusia...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, in general, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05141388175 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74794884954 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542416452442 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6445169983 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.421052632 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224459403449 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737396580382 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679222226869 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138108900004 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480081265982 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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